Mirror

I see this girl in front of me

I see her pain and misery

I see the bruises on her face

I see her most painful memory

When she cried for you

You never came

You just pushed her away

The girl i see decided to end it all

She punched the mirror

And cut her wrist

But that was the girl i saw

Not me

I just walked away

Author's Note

tell me your honest opinon

Reviews

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The reflection in a mirror is not a reflection of reality. However, it is a reflection of our perception of reality.

[Tsuki Kyori]

Hehehe. This was the first one you showed me. :P

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful image you create. To face the mirror and desire death is a hard place to be in. I like the strong statements and the ending. Better to face the problems and then walk away stronger and smarter. We hope. A excellent poem.
Coyote
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[Truman S. Booth]

Very good. You do a good job making the reader believe the narrator is speaking about their own reflection, so that they are relieved at the last three lines. It's shortness contrasts its depths, as it leaves the reader with much to consider: did the narrator know this girl? Who is she referring to when she says "You never came"? I love having room to ponder. Well done.

You may have done it purposefully, but there are two instances were the word "I" is not capitalized. I know some poets keep it lowercase on purpose in an e. e. cummings style, but I thought I'd bring it up in case it was something you missed.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I love this! Very good ending for me! I really really like this very very good!

[rash]

you are so emo

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

It's really good and...dark, I'll say. This poem makes me really sad. :( It's short, but that's what makes me want to read it again! ;p

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

this was a good poem. but it didn't flow too well and the rhyme scheme was a bit off. like heido said, try starting the lines with something different. if this is one of your first poems, then it's ok. but work a little more on flow and grace and you could be a much better poet
however...the content was pretty good. the emotions come across clear and this was a powerful piece, if short. good job

[Hippy]

very good i like it a sad story but good i wrote something like this but my character shoots the mirror you should check it out

[Dillon Cotter]

Very good!!

-Will