Lost

A first Haiku ... I think

Dementia took him.
He who showed me who I was,
Just misplaced himself.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is excellent senryu..and so deep...the one who raised us, showed us the way, taught us so many things....helped us find a place for ourselves and then lost his...like dropping the bookmark and not finding the page again.

[Jupiter]

Congratulations! This haiku won #1 place in the Haiku Content!!

[Eve]

You know, i am not so worried that this will happen to me, I am worried it will happen to those who might love me. heartbreaking not to be recognized by your own family or loved ones.

[Enid Blake]

This one really hits the mark.

[Hollowchick]

awesome :) x

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is excellent! Best Haiku I've ever read. Really exceptional! And it is totally the right count.

[Phibby Venable]

this is wonderful in insights. so dreadfully true. haiku of the heart.

[LA Lorena]

This says so much Swiney. Been there, done that, know this story all too well. I'm not sure about your syllable count, but math never was my strong suit. haiku, senryu, My-ku, no matter. I get it.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I HOPE I have 5-7-5 ... but it sure brings me back to Dad. Thank you ma'am ... you know what ??? What's the title of this??? ===>>> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0b5LzCOc98E

[LA Lorena]

depending on how one pronounces dementia...could be 5 or 6 in that first line.

I love L.A.? Randy newman? short people! I remember him!

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Yes ... a little play in your user name (I Love LA) ... I love when people really stare at the words and take the time to get it. You, Misty, Phibby, Myth, Fabian ... I am blessed with good poetic friends who see so well here.