Balance

Balance

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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Once known as mania or manic depression now known as BPD and BiPolar

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I'm dancing
singing
laughing
Colours drip with vibrancy
Sounds reverberate with manifold reflections 
until they are devoid of energy
The flavour of all foods pirhouette along my taste buds
Touch my skin and I will tell you your name
I thirst
I hunger
I desire 
I love
But 
then 
I descend 
dropping at 
freefall to the depths where nothing 
registers but black, dark and bland, numb and negative 
hate takes the place of love; 
where people's thoughts are mine-fields and their bodies 
are putrid decompositions. My own the worst of all.
crying
fearing
sleeping awake

© 2017 Tony Jordan



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Well Tony. This is a subject close to my professional heart having been a mental health professional for most of my career. You capture in this the real flavours of the highs and lows of the disorder which is such a debilitating condition. Although in saying so there are many highly creative people who have experienced such fluctuations in their emotions and it fuels their creativity. And it is in any case simply an exaggeration of the normal mood swings moist people experience. Nicely done. Desire twice in the first stanza? Perhaps for emphasis of ther swirling carousel of thoughts?

Posted 6 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

6 Months Ago

I agree John - it is a creative source for many sufferers. I know one woman who declined medicinal e.. read more



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I can identify strongly with the up side of the poem as a card (lithium) carrying maniac. It can be fun - up to a point! It's actually uncannily close to my poem manicarus written when I was in full flow. Reading your other reviews we might need to rename this 'the wo/manic cafe'
Cheers, alan

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Being bipolar, I understand this teeter-totter well. I like the way you use font color to show the distinction between passion & lack of it. The only thing I don't see here is anger . . . some depression isn't the weepy kind. Good direct words to convey the way it can be for some!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Totally relate to this one, being bi-polar myself...live for the highs, tolerate the lows...bleed it out on paper...excellent :) x

Posted 5 Months Ago


wow this is so powerful. i really feel like you captured the essence of bipolar disorder. i really love this piece!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Holy moly. This hits entirely too close to home, my friend. I will be back to offer a better and more objective review. At this moment, I feel as though you have gone and exposed my secrets, and I am not entirely comfortable with that! You could not have been more accurate. This...this poem....this offering should be the medical definition. More later.

Posted 6 Months Ago


This is a perfectly done description of bipolarism. Lovely mirrored form to match the content. Interesting idea to present it as a yin and yang situation. Great writing!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Well Tony. This is a subject close to my professional heart having been a mental health professional for most of my career. You capture in this the real flavours of the highs and lows of the disorder which is such a debilitating condition. Although in saying so there are many highly creative people who have experienced such fluctuations in their emotions and it fuels their creativity. And it is in any case simply an exaggeration of the normal mood swings moist people experience. Nicely done. Desire twice in the first stanza? Perhaps for emphasis of ther swirling carousel of thoughts?

Posted 6 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

6 Months Ago

I agree John - it is a creative source for many sufferers. I know one woman who declined medicinal e.. read more
Wow I really enjoyed this piece! My father is bipolar so I know the feelings of this here as I am deathly scared that I may be bipolar since it's hereditary. But either way a wonderful piece

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

6 Months Ago

God! That must be quite a shadow looming. I have seen mother/daughter cases at first hand.
T.. read more
Kesha

6 Months Ago

Oh it is!
You are very welcome! Yes that is vwery true, it can be quite scary
I desired, thirsted, and wept as it was sated by the quickly timed lines... Laced with brilliant word choice, and peppered with negative positivity throughout... I fell numb upon finishing this crazy ride... Artfully penned...

Posted 7 Months Ago


For years I thought I was bipolar too but then I found out I've a knack of changing personalities in different situations lol
As per the context, I think you've portrayed well that feeling of being high and low. And I really liked how you used colours here to describe the mood! Good work, TJ! ☺👍

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Haha well, I think it's a trait of having introverted thinking that made me like that. But yes in a .. read more
Tony Jordan

8 Months Ago

It's cold here. 10 a. m.
I'm just awake!! Lol
Time for porridge and coffee
.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Hahah okay! I thought you hated coffee? 😂

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Tags: manic depressive, BPD, happy, sad, biPolar

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Tony Jordan

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