pour me another poem, please

pour me another poem, please

 

 

she was just pieces of herself

lost nights

another bottle waiting for dawn

her guitar soaked with beer

and blank pages of her life

 

flames consumed what was left

she was just pieces of herself

and the blue tips

of those flames

 

the liquor cabinet

(almost empty)

would never give away her secrets

 

and the smoke filled residue

of her existence

was a few cursive poems

 

and a glamorous black and white photo

of her better days

 

before the puzzle began unraveling 

and our hearts laid her to rest.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/15/17

Reviews

[gram linski]

Live fast, die young Valhalla calls our name, some of the lines almost sing, the creative, addictive personality can be a dangerous thing, especially if you are watching the smoke filled residue of her existence slipping away, pour me another poem, and make it a large one, excellent,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, gram,
j.

[Cassie]

auch...this is a painful ending, drugs, liquor, cigarettes all end up destroying people such a sad ending to a would be musician.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she was a beautiful person inside and out...a best friend...still ache.
thank you, Cassie,read moreshe was a beautiful person inside and out...a best friend...still ache.
thank you, Cassie,
j.

[Cassie]

I am sorry my friend

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Jacob, this is wonderfully sad and made me think of Sylvia Plath for a moment. It reads beautifully and has a lingering warmth that pours with imagery, mood and a kind of dirtiness that is rich with experience & a brilliance fuelled by vice and ‘crazy’. Loved it, many mahalo! Izzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights and kind words, Izzy...
will be back eventually to read...and return the favor...just taking some time away...summer school is quite hectic..three classes, two colleges and just 8 weeks...
mahalo...
j.

[Island Hippy]

You’re very welcome. Enjoy the quiet j! x

[Juliespenhere]

I read this again still love it Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julie...
j.

[Giulia King]

I love this piece! So beautifully written :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kindness,Giullia...

will be back eventually---and will return the favor.
j.

[Rebecca Leigh]

This was beautifully somber.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rebecca.
j.

[bluessadmood]

this was so great its like soft sad music to my ears..
poetry music and smoke mix so well to tell how
a whole life seen through one night..just perfect
lovely write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[bluessadmood]

you are so welcome

[sette]

jacob it is one spectacular poem very deep and symbolical i should say

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... we lived our dreams... but some went up in flames... yet memories live on and art can be found every where... “Pour me another poem” is what we ask for. Beautiful poetry. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pat.
j.

[Ardra]

Pour me another poem... love the title and the poem :))

Reading your poems always makes me want to say this :) one more pls... heheh

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Galadriel...
j.