Take My Heart

Personal~!~

 

 

 

From afar,

I can’t help but watch in fascination.

I ask myself,

Will today be the day?

Yes,

I can do it,

But when I approach your paralyzing sweet scent,

I can’t even speak.

And you giggle,

As I try to form words,

Yet nothing comes out.

 I smile.

Most of the tension is relieved,

Still my purpose this moment is unknown,

And always will be…

I’m terrified of the rejection I feel,

I’m not your usual type.

I’m not popular,

A jock,

Nor do I consider myself handsome,

But I feel comfort around you,

And sort of special,

Yet I’m an alien to everyone else.

You encourage me

To fulfill what I enjoy

And support what I dream of.

So I dare ask,

Just take my heart,

Even if I can’t have yours…

 

Author's Note

Ahh, will she like it? :D

Reviews

[Kelsey Desmond]

Very powerful. I've also noticed that you like pictures! (haha ^_^) but thats kool, because your pictures are awesome. But back to the poem, yes, "She" (whoever she is (: ) will like it. It flows well and is nicely written with lots of meaning.

Also, I love the creativity with the colors! ^_^ I'm so besides the point, but that's just me!

[Aekmy]

I really like the way you colored the text. That made the poem and so did the words!
They flowed, like usual, very nicely.

Keep writing!

[DanaRegen]

Spectacular poem Cameron! Well writen, and overall it was simply, beautiful. It showed the nerves of young love, and also the beauty of it.
Very Nice!
-Dana :)

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow.
This really blew me away. I'm usually discouraged from reading a poem if it's in fancy lettering or coloured text, cos I think it detracts from it... or is trying to compensate for something lacking in the poem itself. But you, my friend, have proven me wrong!
This is so honest, like a confessional laid out in a journal, torn out of the binding and sneakily passed to the heart of the one who holds your heart. It's just so soft and sweet and heartfelt, just like that emotion. Yeah, it's not the most eloquent of poems and it's not a complicated form... but I must say that it's one of the best pieces I've read in a while.
I really feel that the last two lines summed it all up perfectly! Such an honest request, free of all shame and insecurities. Prepared for the worst, but hoping for the best. It's simply amazing.
Keep up the great work!

[OceanTropic]

Aww!! That is absolutely adorable. I loved it.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is a fantastic poem. Very beautifully written and you did a great job. Terrific write!!!

Heather

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is an outstanding piece of writing.
I haven't read any poem so true and so real like this in past recent times.
The way with which you have conveyed your feel with simplicity is very appealing.
A lot of writer do write well with beautifully crafted words but still they lack that "soul" in their writings, I can't say the same for this because I felt that soul of a writer in this piece of writing.

"I'm not popular,
A jock,
Nor do I consider myself handsome,
But I feel comfort around you,
And sort of special," - I loved these lines the most!


Great work , your best till date according to me.

[ATG]

This was a very beautiful and sweet poem. I thought it was very well written. I enjoyed reading it.

[poetic soul]

a sweet aroma of "true innocent love" flows thru this poem... its beautifully crafted... :) if its a personal poem, i would say the gal is Damn lucky to have a lover like you and she is losing out on a lot if she doesnt see it and accept it...

loved this write.. its jus amazing! :)

Regards,
Poetic Soul