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A Poem by Emily Jellybean :)

Your arms around me
Your caress surrounds me

Your whispers of "I love you" in my ear
But it's just another dream I fear

Your lonely fingers dial my heart
Your lonely eyes make me fall apart

I know what's going on
I know I'm just a pawn..

You only call me when you're alone.
Otherwise, you always leave me with a dial tone..

© 2016 Emily Jellybean :)



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Holy kwap, this is profound, and consists of a bunch of juicy lines, and a killer ending. If you'll let me, I would like to suggest that the line read "It's all just another dream, I fear" (it would thus have more power, and connect well with the previous three lines). This is short and powerful, and really drives it all home to the heart. Well freaking done!

(can't believe no one else has read/commented on this yet)

Posted 7 Months Ago


emipoemi

7 Months Ago

If you want to take that route, I won't be one to speak out against it, however, my suggestions are .. read more
Emily Jellybean :)

7 Months Ago

I have no interest in selling or printing my poetry. I post it for free to share the message and fee.. read more
emipoemi

7 Months Ago

Like I said: you do you. That's what matters most.

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Added on January 29, 2016
Last Updated on February 24, 2016
Tags: Poetry, poem, sad

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Emily Jellybean :)
Emily Jellybean :)

Sparkman, AR



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I am simply Emily. Words hardly describe me. Im not an open book to most people, but if you know me well enough you can read. I do not enjoy people who mourn in self pity constantly. I do not like peo.. more..

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