Beauty In Me

Can't you see the beauty in me
When everyone sees a demon before them
Their own ignorance makes me see
And believe what they think I am

So show me a sign
Show me the beauty of love
Make me believe everything's going to be fine
And I'm not trash to be let go of

Show me and maybe I'll tell you everything
Show me and I'll give all of me to you
And keep your heart from ever hurting
When the rest of the world wants to

I'm not the most qualified man
To be the one to hold your heart
You're the Goddess and I'm everything less than
And I think my heart will eventually fall apart

Do you think I'd be worth it
Do you even want my love to stay
For I'm an American and you're a Brit
But you should know that I'd wait when you're away

All this I'd do for only you
Because you deserve nothing but the best
Even if its not your heart I belong to
The idea calms the beast in my chest

Reviews

[Frieda P]

The ache for acceptance is apparent in this read....sounds like a long distance relationship too...

'calms the beast in my chest'...great line!

[F.Gentil]

Very engaging and beautifully written. However, I was actually waiting for you to show me (the reader) the beauty of you and what lives in you. And maybe because the speaker wants the British love to acknowledge his internal beauty, the reader doesn't ever find out the beauty within him, except the personification of how everyone sees him as a demon or how he feels he is a beast, as noted in the first and last stanza. I think you could possibly if for one stanza or a line or two personify the beauty you see in yourself just for dynamic appeal, and then end with "the beast in my chest" because by doing so, at the end you will have the audience with two perspectives of the speaker, one which personifies him negatively and the later which personifies him beautifully. Just an idea. Nice work nonetheless.

[Ian Faraway]

I was sort of trying to go for the mystery of that beauty. Because most people see different things in other people. They see a monster, some see beauty (what that beauty is is different than what someone else might see). So the speaker is still trying to figure out what the love could possibly see in him. But I might need to write another stanza. Thanks for the read and review. :) -Ian

[F.Gentil]

Ah, I definitely noticed that, just wasn't sure if it was intentional. With that said, brilliant and if you write another stanza buddy, I will definitely like to re-read. And no problem buddy. -F.Gentil

[shallimarRose]

Another beautiful write Ian.. I love it.. so she is a Brit?? I love the accents they have..
This part really resonated in me..

"Their own ignorance makes me see
And believe what they think I am"

I use to feel that way too.. I almost destroyed my own life because I was told I was bad so you start to believe it.. dont Believe a word of it Ian.. Continue writing from your heart. Perhaps this lady is not going to feel the same but believe me one day someone will take notice of you .. huggs, Rose

[Ian Faraway]

I have no doubt about it. Some day. But I can't help but think that I deserve something nice, too. Especially with all the crap I've put up with over the past years.