Whats wrong with me

Whats wrong with me

A Poem by Weedies
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I wrote this to capture...

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I am falling into my own mind.

I am trying to stand, as to start my own journey,

but as I exhaust into bed at night,

bloody scraped knees from my digression.

I seek for my cause,

but this matter in sight is so disgusting

A fear stained howl of gnarling thoughts.

an eerie confusion and literal, physical, pain.

the confusion has its own pecular voice,

and its screams.

and it screams!

Not as a startled shriek...

but like a woman being tortured in a dark room,

imagine her screams...

full of pain

full of fear

full of confusion

I can feel every sound of that womans cry,

like spiders on my spinal chord crawling to my ears.

I've memorized the pitch and tone

so much so that my life mirrors the pitch and clones the tone

and I am the sound and I am the pain

and I am, and I am, and I am... and...

I want to simply die while screaming in myself.

because it seems to me, as that all i can be, is that echoing scream.

coming to the end of a painful origin,

on a journey to an inevitable silence.


© 2013 Weedies



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Like everyone else I too think this is a powerful write. Strong emotions are portrayed very well. Very descriptive poem. I like the phrase ''my life mirrors the pitch and clones the tone.'' A good and sincere write

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow...I can feel the emotion...makes me stop and think :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


dark descriptive imagery

great write

Posted 4 Years Ago


wow a pretty powerful piece, but enjoyed

Posted 4 Years Ago


Great poem with great imagery, powerful and heart felt.

Posted 4 Years Ago


ink is liberating...but words are freedom
powerful

Posted 4 Years Ago


"as that all i can be, is that echoing scream". Wow such great imagery. This poem is dark but beautiful. I loved the choice of words. This poem drags you along down a very dark place. Thank you for this great poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Weedies

4 Years Ago

Justin, thanks man, i really like what i achieved with this poem but i wanted to get a review from a.. read more

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Weedies
Weedies

colorado springs, CO



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I am a young poet, rapper and musician. i want to get some of my stuff out there and see if its any good. i consider myself very different from others in many ways, but my goal is to show my differenc.. more..

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A Poem by Weedies



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