Little Bird

Little Bird

 

I saw a little bird the other day

It flew headfirst into a brick wall

and died alone on the sidewalk below

I laughed at first until I realized

that little bird was me

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

so sad. very much like your absence here.

[s y e]

Woah, what a twist... You won't be that little bird, I won't let you, Will. Sad one my friend.

[willweb]

Thank so much for your kindness. I am happy you stopped by on this one.

[Eve]

This reminds me of that song by the bee gees "I started a Joke", and isn't that how it is when you realize you are walking in someone else's shoes, then you know how it feels and it's just not funny anymore.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Eve. Yes, it does seem that way.

[Matching Socks]

It wasn't very nice to laugh about a poor little bird dying.
I thought you were more sensitive than that. :)
It's a good little poem Will. Life does throw a brick wall for us to crash into from time to time.
And it suck when it happens.

[willweb]

Yes, it wasn't nice but your review of my work is. Thanks so much Ana. I may help this little bird back to life.

[Confuser]

Short and great. I'm laughing. That's inspiring. Maybe I need to try and write a shorter poem. It had a great impact and that's so important. Thank you.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Confuser. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[Confuser]

Yep, I did.

[Hímayun kuræshýe]

...the ending of the poem says it all .
my thoughts resemble yours but i must say that i would'nt be able to define and present them the way you do ! i m glad that somewhere these thoughts and feelings are getting shaped beautifully


thanks for sharing ...cheers!

[willweb]

My friend, you underestimate yourself. I have read your work and it is beautiful, but thank you for that compliment.

[June Fowler]

sad to know that u feel this way. If I could help it u would not be alone there out on the side walk and dead,for though u are hurt and wish that u had died wounds can heal , just give it time! care to be my friend?

[willweb]

Thanks so much June. It is very kind of you to offer these words today. But really, I am fine.

[R Smith]

Hey Will i do this all the time, beat my head against a brick wall (not literally of course) but these damn walls are everywhere, we have hopes and dreams and sometime they hit that wall and die on the ground like your little bird, your poem though will soar because its so beautiful bravo :)

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Richard for your nice words today. You are correct, there are brick walls everywhere. I may need a better GPS.

[yuki]

Oh my gosh..this is sad i totally feel you in this little words can express great deals nice write

[willweb]

Thanks Yuki. Yes, it is sad but sometimes it feels that way.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Here lies a truth we see every day that so many struggle to conceive. People drive themselves into their own fate and tend to realize that only once it's too late. Such an intelligent poem, cut straight to the core of my writing inspiration. Great write my friend!

[willweb]

Thanks so much Zachary for reading and commenting on my work. You have nailed it my friend. That is exactly the point.

[June Fowler]

short n sweet!