APOCALYPTIC SKIES

APOCALYPTIC SKIES

A Poem by M. L. F.

The earth's light extinguished like a wick at Seven

To hollowed earth stars were hurled


His anger grew wings and he thrashed against Heaven

Causing darkness and chaos to swirl...

His Angel, in horror, neath the shower of stars

Watched his wings crash against Heaven's gates


Her love, her Phoenix caused tribulation...

War

Fighting God for his Angel's fate

For The two had Intertwined now..

In a way that no one knew

How his tears left such stains now..

Cold obsidian colored hues..

on her heart as he fell down, landing safely in her arms

Where she pet his curly head now and she quelled his false alarm

Lay with me here on this dark night..

Pray the stars all realign

Long as we two still are left now,

Neath Apocalyptic Skies...

© 2017 M. L. F.



Author's Note

M. L. F.


I see that this piece can come off a bit too cryptic, so this week it shall undergo a bit of editing, also to deepen and darken out the imagery.. which I would love to be as rich and visually dark as possible, apocalypse is a dark subject, so to speak, at least visually it should be.... A little explanation of the premise:
the piece itself is about a female angel and her human love who becomes angry at God because of her distance, as she worries for the state of his soul, and thrashes against Heaven in his anger, causing a cataclysmic fall of stars and some apocalyptic things to stir.... The piece is inspired... I hope this lends clarity to a more mystical work... :)

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I kinda disagree that this needs to be edited or explained to such a degree in your author's notes. I believe your message is a universal one that can be read by many different people in very different ways. We all have our various apocalyptic experiences in life, so there's no need to define that or walk it back or anything. You've given the reader a relatable path to walk & it will look different for each of us who walk it. I love a poem that does that. Your sensations of doom & gloom are well done, not too gloomy, but just threatening enuf to show how life can be a little punishing at times!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Months Ago

DAWWW.... Thanks ;) :) She / you are right.. I plan to leave it as is, until one day I decide it i.. read more
emipoemi

2 Months Ago

......in truth, let me be the third to disuade you. You don't need to edit this at all (regardless e.. read more
M. L. F.

2 Months Ago

Thank you.. :)



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You have created a great vision of poetic turmoil here. There is lots of good imagery describing how the couple comfort each other. It is enigmatic with the feel of greek myth. I was slightly puzzled by your phrase wick at seven but then noticed the rhyme with heaven. You didn't follow the rhyming though though and I feel you should decide which way you are going to go. I also think your phrase pet his curly head could be improved.
Great work though.
Regards
Alan

Posted 1 Month Ago


Wow, this is absolutely amazing; one of the best poems I've ever read!

Posted 1 Month Ago


I kinda disagree that this needs to be edited or explained to such a degree in your author's notes. I believe your message is a universal one that can be read by many different people in very different ways. We all have our various apocalyptic experiences in life, so there's no need to define that or walk it back or anything. You've given the reader a relatable path to walk & it will look different for each of us who walk it. I love a poem that does that. Your sensations of doom & gloom are well done, not too gloomy, but just threatening enuf to show how life can be a little punishing at times!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Months Ago

DAWWW.... Thanks ;) :) She / you are right.. I plan to leave it as is, until one day I decide it i.. read more
emipoemi

2 Months Ago

......in truth, let me be the third to disuade you. You don't need to edit this at all (regardless e.. read more
M. L. F.

2 Months Ago

Thank you.. :)
deep, powerful, biblical, prophetic. like a revelation. the struggle between spirit and flesh, heaven and earth. this delves into a very human and complex idea. an epic battle. very deep and philosophical. awesome wording and imagery. outstanding. :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


M. L. F.

11 Months Ago

Thank you... I am glad the piece felt grand... That was my hope.. Thank you for your time in readin.. read more
I loved the way you captured the mystical feelings!
I really enjoyed reading this!
Than you for sharing :)!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zaisham9393

11 Months Ago

Yeah, I had to research though lol !!
M. L. F.

11 Months Ago

Research is good for you... Keeps you sharp! ;) Thanks.. haha...
zaisham9393

11 Months Ago

Thank you for your support. I will forever be grateful...lol... ;)!
Okay, I can finally understand it now! And my my! The full blast of it hit me!

"Fighting God for his Angel's fate
For The two had Intertwined now..
In a way that no one knew
How his tears left such stains now.. "
Powerful lines! I think we find solace in thinking that we can change our fate, that we can do whatever crosses our mind even we do it too sometimes but there comes a time in life where we are left being challenged by the higher powers..
Superb! I must have been dozing when I last read it :p

Posted 11 Months Ago


This one leaves me with similar impressions your "Pandora" piece left, for me at least. I will use the word "striking," or "struck" -- if lightning were but brush strokes - your words & their deeply seeded levels of origin & substance would be the oil used & the oil left, upon this page ..your "canvas." You cast quite the powerful storm Misty L F. Like an oil painting, you can "stare" (read over & over) for quite some time in admiration. Your images & carefully chosen words sound natural. This piece sings, as much as it does weep, entwining much together, all which can each be deeply appreciated, by myself as long as the rest of your audience. Congratulations on a job well done.

You are angelic.

Phoenix

Posted 11 Months Ago


Very beautiful Misty, a biblical scene you have crafty presented. I liked the wave of passion in the two lovers. Your poem reminded of the great Greek drama 'Agamemnon' a bit. The love and passion both are lovely with a beautiful imagery of stars, earth, heaven. Thank you for the story in the writer's note too, helped me to understand the whole thing better...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

11 Months Ago

You are very welcome... and thank you for the detailed review of this piece. It is appreciated..read more
"Lay with me here on this dark night..

Pray the stars all realign

Long as we two still are left now,

Neath Apocalyptic Skies..."
To be honest, these are the only lines which I understood and felt meaning in..that doesn't mean it's not good coz it is but it just flew over my head and that's a first that happened to me regarding your write-ups..
Sorry for the lame review,Misty 😛. I enjoyed it nevertheless ☺

Posted 11 Months Ago


Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I know I am!
😉 😂
M. L. F.

11 Months Ago

Haha...lol!
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

And you are quite fierce I think but in a sweet way 😉
Certainly very apocalyptic in tone and expression!

A rather different poem than i usually read from you; this one has multiple tones. What appeared to be a poem about the end of the world, took on biblical and mythological proportion and concluded with a sensual, loving image of an angel and his loved one embracing beneath these apocalyptic skies, hoping that their love may just halt the advance of the coming doom.

This is very much an idea i can see has been inspired by the apocalyptic works of Mr. S. King. And 2017 brings us The Dark Tower!!!

Another fine write, Misty. Full of wonderful images and well written as always.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

11 Months Ago

Thank you Doodley. I thought you might appreciate the tones of this piece, with your global / mysti.. read more

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