Travels

the captured thought inside the mind petitioned to to be heard

given a platform

too long denied

almost forgotten

remember

those plans made and counted on, waiting 

lingering, even now in the ether

on the sidelines

ready

countless hours spoken and discussed

how could you forget

and yet, I almost did

until today.

those moments exist in the stillness between seconds,

alive 

and we can travel there

be as we were

all is as it once was 

life squared plus two

Reviews

[Little Whisper]

Hello Alisa... I just recently was thinking how wonderful it would be to travel and I thought sadly that by the time I am able to do it I'll be too old to dance ( at my age I guess it's natural to have these thoughts and worries). But then I read your poem and your words helped me to see things a bit differently. I hope I'm not getting too far off track... but, I am very thankful that your words brought to me reminders that it's never too late to dance. These are the thoughts your poem brought to mind for me wonderfully. :)

[Alisa Js]

Hi Dennis,

Thank you for stopping by and for sharing your thoughts.

Alisa:-)

[Dennis A. Clark]

An interesting one. There's a longing here--a yearning for what once was?

The opening line throws me a bit because of its rhythm. That opening line is written in iambic heptameter, so it sets me up for a form poem (a classical ballad, for instance). Did you set out to write a different kind of poem and end up elsewhere (through your traveling)?

[Alisa Js]

Aloha Kelvin,

Thank you!

alisa ;-)

[kelvin]

good piece of work i must say i love the start you stating the mind petitioning to be heard giving a platform too long denied speak then speak mind speak lol. good write as always keep writing fellow writer.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think this is more about words allowing us to travel...either by reading them or by writing them...

our writings allow us to travel places in our minds...explore our inner being by uncovering things about ourselves we never knew.

it's discovery, just like taking a trip to an exotic place...

i was on the plane going to wherever it was you went in this poem.

thanks for the ride.

i like the metaphor in the first stanza..would like to see that revisited towards the end...

but otherwise...wonderfully worded piece.

jacob

[Alisa Js]

Happy Thanksgiving thoughts, Tara!

So nice to read your thoughts again. You have been on my mind lately. I trust all is well. Stay strong, you!!! Thank you for stopping by, I have missed you as well.

Sending you thoughts of everything amazing,

always...

alisa ;-)

[Tara]

Hi Stranger...good to be here again and reading your words...I love this one...great opening line and I love the line about the stillness existing between seconds...beautiful. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving. I miss you.

[Alisa Js]

Aloha Sami,

Thank you for taking the time to stop by. It is always a delight reading your thoughts.

Sending you thoughts of everything amazing.

always,

alisa :-)

[Alisa Js]

Aloha serah,

Thank you for your kind thoughts and kindness. I am most encouraged. I am so glad you understand and am deeply touched by your words.

Wishing you well, always...

alisa :-)

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~ ditto... :) (sorry i missed this)...

[Sami Khalil]

A nice poem .
I love the lines:
those moments exist
in the stillness
between seconds,
alive.
Wow