Your secret to the grave

YOUR SECRET TO THE GRAVE

WHEN YOU'RE BORN THE CLOCK STARTS TICKING
YOUR DEEDS ARE GATHERED DAY TO NIGHT
EACH ONE IS CAREFULLY RECORDED
NOT ALL WILL BE HELD FROM SIGHT
ALL YOUR DAYS WILL BE COLLECTED
THEY WILL BE BALANCED AGAINST YOU, MY FRIEND
WHATEVER SEEDS WERE SOWED IN YOUTH
WILL BE REAPED AGAINST YOU IN THE END
YOU CAN'T CRUSH AN INNOCENT SPIRIT
JUST PRETEND THEY DID'NT KNOW
YOU CAN'T ASSUME A MEMORY LOST
OR JUST SAY IT WAS'NT SO
YOU CAN'T TAKE A CHILDHOOD AWAY
AND THEN NEVER GIVE IT BACK
YOU CAN'T JUST PASS OUT A PUZZLE
WITH AN ANSWER THAT CAN'T BE CRACKED
YOU CAN'T HIDE BEHIND YOUR SILENCE
ABOUT THE CHILD YOU DID NOT SAVE
YOU CAN'T CLOSE THE DOOR BEHIND YOU
OR TAKE YOUR SECRETS TO THE GRAVE

ANGELEA PAUGH

8-17-16

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and true words dear Angela.
"YOU CAN'T HIDE BEHIND YOUR SILENCE
ABOUT THE CHILD YOU DID NOT SAVE
YOU CAN'T CLOSE THE DOOR BEHIND YOU
OR TAKE YOUR SECRETS TO THE GRAVE"
The above lines is true for man and not for many. I would loved to have long talks with Hemingway and Kosinski. What they could tell us. A worthwhile poem dear Poet.
Coyote

[angeleapaugh]

Again thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I enjoyed your work.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Here's you points for a great poem.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Your secret to the grave"
angeleapaugh,
I was drawn in by your structure and of course the message! The first paragraph is a presentation of theme and then the remaining body the explanation.
Your wording is picturesque and honest and that is just what this writing was meant to be. Oh, I like that so much. Your poem placed the reader in a place of honestly looking at their life!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Chris A Jones]

In a world where everything is online, the words here are truer than ever before.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you so much.

[Michael S]

Amazing poetry.
I love your take on how people do the things they shouldn't do and feel they could hide it for endless time.
I liked this. Keep it up.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you Michael S

[Ashwin Shanker]

Please revise the line to this one, "WHEN YOU'RE BORN THE CLOCK STARTS TICKING"

There were a couple of other inconsistencies here and there, I recommend please proof-check it once more.
Otherwise, I loved the theme of this poem. It was very impactful.

[angeleapaugh]

Oh boy this is really helping me. Thank you.

[Ashwin Shanker]

A single quote, not a double quote :P