Scene 4-Lies and Luck

Phone conversation of Hans and Azure

Scene 4-Lies and Luck

 

Characters: Azure (18), Hans (21)

Setting: Montessa's residence and Benjamin's residence, the present.

 

Fifteen minutes after Azure's parents have gone away, she remembers to call Hans.

 

Azure: Hello?

 

Hans: Good morning! Did you just wake up, darling?

 

Azure: Uhm, yes.

 

Hans: How are you feeling?

 

Azure: Bit dizzy and confused.

 

Hans: Hang-over.

 

Azure: Must be.

 

Hans: Sorry, darling.

 

Azure: No worries. Hey! What happened last night?

 

Hans: You don't remember?

 

Azure (sarcastic): Would I ask if I do?

 

Hans: Nothing at all?

 

Azure: Only blurs of events...

 

Hans: Like?

 

Azure: Like party lights. People dancing. Us talking--

 

Hans: Us arguing.

 

Azure: Oh, yeah. Arguing. And... Kissing? Did we really kiss?

 

Hans: Yep. What else?

 

Azure:  Stars above. Numbers... Why are there numbers?

 

Hans: Because you were talking about algebraic expressions.

 

Azure: Oh, did I?

 

Hans: Yep. What else?

 

Azure:Uhm... Wait... I got this feeling something weird happened...

 

Hans: (laughs) Try to remember.

 

Azure: I'm trying, you know.

 

Hans: I called you beautiful.

 

Azure: Eh? (pause) Oh...

 

Hans: Then right after that, you practiced on me what you have learned in Flirting 101.

 

Azure: Come on. I don't know how to flirt.

 

Hans: Beer does wonders.

 

Azure: Okay, done with jokes. Be serious now.

 

Hans: Hey, it's true!

 

Azure: What is?

 

Hans: You sexually harassed me. (chuckles)

 

Azure: What?!

 

Hans: (whispers) Well, you actually went on top of me and started kissing me.

 

Azure: Hans, really! You are being so full of yourself now, aren't you? And--and... Oh my goodness... Oh, my...

 

Hans: You remember now.

 

Azure: That was embarrassing!

 

Hans: No, darling. That was hot. (smirks)

 

Azure: What happened next?

 

Hans: Well, I told you to stop but you didn't. So, yeah.

 

Azure: And... And... We had s-sex?!

 

Hans: Don't worry. I was gentle with you.

 

Azure: Arghh!!!

 

Hans (laughing): Hey, chill!

 

Azure: Oh, my. Oh, my.

 

Hans: What's wrong?

 

Azure: My, my. I just lost my virginity and I don't know it!

 

Hans: It's okay. You'll move on. (grins)

 

Azure: Hans! Hans! Oh no...

 

Hans: You. Are. So. Funny. (laughs boisterously)

 

Azure (shakes head in disbelief): No, no, no, no, no...

 

Hans (amused): Silly. Before you do anything crazy over there, listen to me first, okay?

 

Azure: No, no, no...

 

Hans (trying to be serious): You are still a virgin.

 

Azure: No, no, no...

 

Hans: Hey, it's true. Nothing happened between us.

 

Azure (has somewhat recovered): You expect me to believe you simply because you said so?

 

Hans: I expect you to believe me because I happen to remember everything last night and you don't.

 

Azure: So, was it just a joke?

 

Hans: Yes.

 

Azure: We didn't go to the meadow? I didn't seduce you?

 

Hans: We went to the meadow and you seduced me. But no sex.

 

Azure: How is that possible?

 

Hans (beaming): Beer does wonders.

 

Azure: I don't understand...

 

Hans: Just trust me.

 

Azure: You promise you're telling the truth?

 

Hans: I promise.

 

Azure: Thank heavens.

 

Hans: You amuse me, darling.

 

Azure: Oh, Hans. (sighs)

 

Hans: Have you eaten your breakfast?

 

Azure: Not yet. Oops. That reminds me. I have to cook now.

 

Hans (suspicious): You don't cook, darling.

 

Azure: Well, yeah, but I have to. Today.

 

Hans: Is that your punishment for being drunk?

 

Azure: No. My mom and dad went out.

 

Hans (impressed): Sweet.

 

Azure: Went to Antique to visit a sick friend.

 

Hans: Oh. How about your brother?

 

Azure: Here with me but he's still asleep. I have to cook for both of us.

 

Hans: Must be the greatest test of your life.

 

Azure: (laughs) Yeah, yeah.

 

Hans: Glad to hear your laugh. I miss that.

 

Azure: I miss yours more. How are you?

 

Hans: I'm good, darling.

 

Azure: Will you be working today?

 

Hans (cheerful): Nope. Day-off.

 

Azure: That's great! By the way, I'd better start cooking now. Wish me luck.

 

Hans: Sure. You need tons of it. (chuckles)

 

Azure: Bye, bye, darling! Enjoy your day!

 

Hans: Wish you're here though. Bye.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading! :)

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Nice dialogue here. Well done.

[David]

very nice lol, I enjoyed every line :) great job hun

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Ryan. :)

[David]

You're welcome :) lol

[ASPAR (A Sol Poet Arnay..]

I really liked this... I read the whole thing 'I tell you this held my interest from the get go, yep love it.
I enjoyed the teasing & expressions that you used in the dialogue between them both..
Good work thank you :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much. :)

[costa siwale]

Lovely story.. I enjoy Azure and Hans z scenarios..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I enjoy writing about them, too. Haha. Thank you so much, Costa. :)

[Calibaster]

I like where you're going with this! It is always very entertaining to read your stories! I would like to see them acted out sometime.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Me, too! It would be fun to see Azure and Hans in flesh. Thank you, Alverran! :)

[Calibaster]

You're very welcome!!!

[Rose of many colours]

as always very entertaining..Have a great day..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much! :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Nice work, it is not easy to build character through dialogue alone..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I don't know. I find it harder to build characters through descriptions and narrations.
Thank you, Leslie. :)

[annabellee]

Really good scene indeed. Good dialogue and I really like these two characters and their relationship. Keep up the good work :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Anna. :)

[annabellee]

you are most welcome :)

[Diana]

I like it. She's a little prim and he's a little "boisterous', as you say. Opposites attract and bring each other out.

Women always seem to be the ones doing the cooking, though. I can't help but notice that. I'd like to se Hans make her breakfast...especially since she's hung over.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Opposites attract and bring each other out.

I can't count how many times I've been in that kind of situation, too. Haha.
Yes, women does the cooking but Azure is information-rich but experience-poor so she's one of the few exceptions. Haha.

Thank you, Diana. :)

[Douglas White]

Your dialog is improving, but you really should break the dialog up some to give details on the background and actions of each character - especially since they are not together. Give some descriptions of each of their surroundings and how they are moving about in them as they talk. You said below that you weren't so good at narration and description - the only cure for that is to do more of both. Give it a shot, no one is going to laugh at you. We'll be here to help you do better. That's what we do here, right?

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I have read some plays and I noticed that they're not giving out much details either. Uhm, I'd try your suggestion, Doug. Thank you so much! :)

[Douglas White]

There's a huge difference between stage plays and screenplays. Make sure you do a little studying of both, and you will see not only the difference between them, but the reasons for them as well. Most of it has to do with the differences in production.