The Christmas Present

This is my contest entry for the Christmas in July contest.

Billy was sleeping in his bed.
Suddenly, his eyes opened wide.
One thought consumed all of his being -- it's Christmas!
         u    p    d
He   j   m    e    out of bed,
put on his robe and slippers,
and   r             a            n   to the staircase.

He s
        l
          i
            d
                down the banister

and looked         the tree.
                 under

There were presents        presents
    presents    presents
        presents                 presents
all around.

He looked for a present with his Name on it.

Finally, he found one.

He knew he shouldn't, but he couldn't resist, so he  O P E N E D  it.
            _______
It was a | JACK |  in the box.
           |---------|
       u r
He  t    n   the handle ssssslllllooooowwwwwlllllyyyyy
       d e
                           /
                        /     JACK
       POP  !    /
and  POP  !    |           |   showed his face.
       POP  !    |-----------|

                                                                    o                      r
Billy was so excited.  He played with it over and  v  and revo and  e  and over again.
                                                                    e                      v
                                                                    r                      o


It was the best Christmas ever!

Author's Note

Ignore any problems and just read for enjoyment!

Reviews

[None]

What a fun and exciting poem about Christmas! To see things through the eyes of a child is so amazing. All the best in the Christmas in July contest.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Oh my God! That is so creative! This is such a playful style; I've never seen anything quite like it. ^^ It was cute, simple story and the entire format was just amazing! Outstanding job, friend!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[French Flair]

The way you put your words is really imaginative. I enjoyed reading it... gave me an image of Billy's excitement on Christmas day.

[PianoandPage]

fun visuals. nice little workout for the eyes. definately took a simple story and made it POP!

[Grandma Auntie]

I love this! I could just see little Billy and feel his excitement! So much fun!

[Fran Marie]

What a unique piece ~ love the formating of showing the actions taking the reader eyes and mind

there ~following and sensing the excitment as we read ~

Creative & Well Crafted my friend and THanks for submitting this to C'Mas in JuLy ContesT~

Fran Marie

[Lind]

This brought back memories of Christmas excitement! It was as fun to look at as it was to read.

[Leah Simone]

haha - this was fun - I especially enjoyed the over and revo.

[Gandré]

ohhh this was delicious ! I absolutely loved your play and creativeness! What a sweet story for my eye and my imagination!
Skilful manipualation of imaginary to deepen its meaning and make it responsive to both, our romantic needs and to suit our critical eye.