Rapturous Passion

For a contest ...

Rapturous Passion

Silk draped words of tenderness

Encapsulate shared dreams,

And whimsical whispers gently brush

Against two beating hearts,

Entwined in private rituals accord

No time or space exists apart from theirs. 

 

Musky melding intoxicating scents

Abridge both lovers' souls,

In vapour resonance their love unfolds

In singularity they both reside,

For they seek not approval

From a tainted unexacting world.

 

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

Phil ...

This is incredibly done....
These two lines...

in a class ...by themselves

"No time or space exists apart from theirs."

"Musky melding intoxicating scents"

Only you could capture the heat and smoldering sensuality ....
generated ...when lost in the oblivion without as much as one single raunchy word...

That my poetic brother is... SKILL

Blessssssssssssssssssss

[Lucy Kennedy]

That was a beautiful, sensual poem. I loved it. Nice work.

[Phibby Venable]

I like the careful word choices and the way it comes together..Excellent.

[xlynne]

i agree with many of the other reviewers. this is superbly done, your writing is flawless and honest. the title is perfect for this piece. well done!

[Emily B]

Your title perfectly expresses my thoughts on reading the work.

[Greg the Bard]

I like the rhym within rhym. YUours of words of such depth is wonderful. You havwe done so much with just to stanzas. I like it.

[pal]

Love feelings expressed powerfully and in all its brevity.

pal

[The Autumn Faerie]

You take great care with your choice of words, I see.
And the effect is dazzling.

None of us should seek approval from this tainted world, I agree..

*sigh*

Well done!

[Jennifer Ryan]

I don't read poetry too much but I always enjoy yours Phil. Nicely done. You have greatly given justice to the feelings two people can have for one another.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

fantastic job

[Alicia Isabella Lane]

You continue to amaze me, I love the intense provocative passion of this piece. It reminded me of these lines Neruda wrote "I love you as certain dark things are to be loved, in secret, between the shadow and the soul. I love you as the plant that never blooms, but carries in itself the light of hidden flowers." This love needs no justification it exists for the understanding of itself alone. You said this perfectly here: "In singularity they both reside,

For they seek not approval

From a tainted unexacting world."

Well done!!!