Betrayal....

This is kind of confusing but it makes since to me.

I know how she feels; having to deal with the same thing I had to go through.

Having to deal with him leaving and then trying to come back to be in her life again.

I Know i'm being selfish and making it all about me,

But I can't help it,

he makes me feel hopeless.

Inside feels torn and ripped apart.

The shocking part about this is that my fake "bestfriend" made me feel this way.

With words my heart can not express, but inside it longs for me to keep him.

Sometimes at night, not as often as it used to be,

I wonder what could have happened and what could have been if I just let him have what he wanted.

I Know I should be strong for what I decided

but the hurt takes time to go away and I need more time.

Eventually the hurt will pass

but for now I will continue to ache

and to put my heart into a fake mold

to please the people around me.

Just keep my head up and don't let anyone see through my act.  

Author's Note

this is more of a story than a poem but i wasnt sure which catagory it fit under

Reviews

[Shannon]

This is a beautifully written poem, and one written so deeply that I think many can sympathise. I do wish I could be as strong as that.

[Brianna Brie]

Your writing is a strong self expression of the thoughts that go on in our heads while capturing the pain, loss, and doubt. You do sound like a strong person with the wisdom to know what you want and are willing to endure in a relationship. "Eventually the hurt will pass but for now I will continue to ache" This line tells me that you have accepted and given yourself permission to grieve, but you will not let it destroy you. Heartfelt write!

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

Sounds like you are a strong young woman to be able to turn your back on someone you seem to adore but know is not good for you. Let her deal with the fall out and you are right, the ache will ease with time, you are young and another love will come to you in good time. Well done, keep writing and I noted one typo repeated 'know' rather than 'no' line 3 and 12. Being betrayed by your best friend, will reap her natural karma and you now know who your real friends are. All the best LLB

[An owl on the moon]

I can relate to the pain of betryal, and appreciate the way you express this through the inner conversation. You say so much in so few words. Well done! You could certainly expand this into a story if you wished!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Did you ever make a cup of coffee, been distracted, then come back to it later when it had gone cold. Even if you put it in a microwave and reheat the thing, it never the same; just bitter and tasteless. This is what your composition reminder me of; second time round attempts at a doomed relationship.

Well done, you certainly stimulated my little grey cells with your poignant and fascinating write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[-Adam-]

Hi I really like this. It is deep, I don't have any one this sight, but I have similar writings to this in my book. It is a poem because you put it on paper. Well done.

-Adam-

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Great poem or story
what ever you call it.
I enjoyed it very much.
And I understand, too.
Because I went through it, too.
I still look back on it today.
Even though it has been like forever.