Make Believe

Make Believe

A Poem by bre
"

Make believe isn't just for children...

"

I make believe

When you confess your love

That it's my face

you see in the stars

lighting up the sky above

 

I make believe 

when she calls

That you're just friends

They're rumors

Whispers offered with no proof

 

I make believe

when we wake up 

That our reality

is my nightmare

And that my dreams will come true

 

I make believe

When you speak

That what you say is true

so that every night is justified

when I come home to you.

 


© 2010 bre



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"lighting the sky up above" try changing this to "lighting up the sky above" I think youll find it flows better and "That your just friends"..."your" there should be "you're" as in "you are". This piece was sad and left me feeling sorry for the poor woman. She should take a stand and lose that jerk and find her a good man! lol Oh, gosh, be careful, somone will think it's an autobiographical piece and you'll have lovelorn men beating down the doors of your page! ;o)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Ohhhhhh my goddddd! This ones another one of my favorites, you've just got into my top five-well you've actually been in there but now you've been bumped up a spot-anyway im rambling. Good job :) Keep up the good work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"lighting the sky up above" try changing this to "lighting up the sky above" I think youll find it flows better and "That your just friends"..."your" there should be "you're" as in "you are". This piece was sad and left me feeling sorry for the poor woman. She should take a stand and lose that jerk and find her a good man! lol Oh, gosh, be careful, somone will think it's an autobiographical piece and you'll have lovelorn men beating down the doors of your page! ;o)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MUSIC IS MY LIFE TOO!
IS THAT NIAGARA FALLS - NEW YORK OR ONTARIO?
WELL MY DEAR BRE YOU ARE A CREATIVE ANOMALY AND IT'S OBVIOUS THAT WORDS ADORE YOU AND DELIGHT IN YOUR COMPANY.
WE ARE LOOKING FOR DARING BOLD MUSICALLY INCLINED PEOPLE LIKE YOURSELF TO LIGHT UP OUR MARQUEE AT:thepoeticminds.ning.com (poetry, literature and dreams) WHERE WE ARE MUSIC MAD AND ENDORSE YOUR ARTISTIC FREEDOM AND FREEOM OF SPEECH.
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Posted 7 Years Ago


A interesting poem. Make believe left me feeling empty. It is funny how we know something is good. And when it is not so good. Description and flow of poem was excellent. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


thisis really pretty, and so true.

i can relate in many ways, many forms.

keep writing, i enjoy your work.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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niagara falls, NY



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