Time in sun and shadows

 

Time

How it paints

The face of the world

Seconds tick-talking

Minutes moving miles

Hours of sun and sea and sky

Days of drifting dreams

Time

Flowing like droplets in a river

Weeks in woven light

Months of moments

Years of yellow moons

Epochs and eras

Past and present

Time

Passing over the clock’s face

Autumn, winter, spring, summer

And then they come again

In ages rhythmical

Through generations untold

Spans of living space

Time

How it passes

Slowly, softly, sweetly

And as time passes

In sun and shadows

May your heart truly know

How I only love you more…

Reviews

[LJW]

Effective line breaks.
Excellent alliteration.

"And then they come again" I would suggest changing to "Only to come again."

The first 3/4 of your piece reads like poetry. The ending, however, reads more like a greeting card or a personal letter to a loved one.

I would suggest, if I may, that to keep the tone of the poem throughout, to replace the reference to loving this one person to a more general reference about love.

[Helena]

This is a wonderful write.....my kind of poem! Beautifully written
and 'painted'. Very good job indeed! ~ Helena

[Lizanne]

One of our most precious assets...time. As always you do poetic justice to what you write. A small four letter word that literally holds our life in it's hands. And the greatest gift you can give someone you love...the gift of your time.

[Stacey Watts]

Very beautifully expressed. Time is all we have sometimes. This was a wonderful piece. Excellent

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. great tribute to the arms of time.. wrapping around us first slowly.. as in youth time is never fast enough.. then the more we age the faster time slips and slides. Love the flow, feel and beauty of the words you have woven together. Very upbeat .. with a message of love throughout all seasons and time for one so dear. A truly wonderful writing that I thoroughly enjoyed! Thank you so much!!! =)

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

this is beautiful & deep. "Hours of sun and sea and sky Days of drifting dreams" i love these lines. time does have way of slipping by so quickly, changing everything around us before we realize it. gorgeous imagery here. well written, and beautiful piece.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I read many things on time, even wrote on myself but this has to be one of the most eloquent looks at the only thing that truly lasts forever.

[Fran Marie]

A most beautiful and awe inspiring piece of writing~you never fail

to write the beauty into each poetic verse~ Quite lovely indeed~Fran

[Samuel Dickens]

Time--when I was 16, I couldn't wait to be older. Now I am, and I don't want to be. Your words are eloquent.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Ohhh this is very nice! I was interested in the movement of time even as a little. I hated how it passes quickly when you don't want it to and moves so slowly when you wished it would hurry up. This is a delight of color, rich with meaning. It's beautiful!