'Mortal's End'

'Mortal's End'

A Poem by costa siwale
"

the inevitable ending

"



A
s you would,
Poison my mind, sweet sin!
And lay me in the ground,
against my will.
To coldness,
and darkness.
To only these things.


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© 2016 costa siwale



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costa siwale
your comments, critics are all welcome

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I like how you make the connection from the sin that comes within, to death which takes us when we are at our most vulnerable. Great short work. CD

Posted 7 Months Ago


costa siwale

7 Months Ago

always food to hear your review, always encouraging. Thank you friend, much appreciated
costa siwale

7 Months Ago

*always good
I can feel, in your writer's block, that it feels like the end. Coldness and darkness ... who knows? As Shakespeare wrote .."To sleep, perchance to dream." But It seemed apt that your little poem, full of pathos, was short. Now I am sure you can get on and write again. Best wishes.

Posted 7 Months Ago


costa siwale

7 Months Ago

A dire but accurate interpretation...the feeling is that I am at the apex of all that is my poetry, .. read more
hmm i really like the whole piece i just feel like you could go even further but overall a great write if you feel that way too feel free to ask for my assistance if you want to i would be glad to help but in all likelihood it was most likely the intention and i just have not seen the truth in the words. keep writing my friend i like your flow and style !

Posted 1 Year Ago


TheAimlessWanderer

1 Year Ago

sure i can give you a few lines if you like it might help inspire you here it goes i will only give .. read more
costa siwale

1 Year Ago

these are very helpful lines, you pulled the words 'out of my pen' lol. thank you for sharing your t.. read more
TheAimlessWanderer

1 Year Ago

you are most welcome my friend they are fairly rough but i hope it is enough to get your pens ink fl.. read more
Nice read. It really caught my attention. Well penned. Keep writing and I will keep reading them.Eva

Posted 1 Year Ago


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costa siwale
costa siwale

Lusaka , southern region, Zambia



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