Love/Hate

I feel your body warm against mine,

wrapped in my embrace, so divine.

Never worried about sleeping alone.

I'll always have you here in my home

once we're married and spend every single

night together as we further mingle

while as one we become

the epitome of perfect love.

But then tonight we had our first fight.

Words flew from our mouths like sharp knives.

I left the house and walked outside

to try to get away before we collide

like large rocks floating in space.

They collide with each other and erase

all the hopeful memories from days gone by,

making us believe everything was a lie.

But if it was truth

then show me the proof

it wasn't our youth

making us aloof.

Soon enough it was time

and we once again made our rhymes

and our love exploded. The shine

was more than any defined

in the storybooks about love.

But the problem is those are free of

the heartache, pain, and struggle

because no matter how much you snuggle

the heart plays a dangerous game

when it is put in relation to blame

because in relation it became

nothing more than hate contained.

So then again we go back to the fights,

and now here we are with dark, lonely nights.

All I can do is try to rewrite 

the mess I made when I was alright.

Because I thought I was all right

instead of looking out for the love of my life.

I admit to you that I'm quite contrite

about the way that our last fight

erupted over the course of a few nights.

Now it seems that we are outright

stuck staying up late into the night, 

late into my life, 

stuck without a wife.

I honestly thought that she would be my wife

maybe even the center of my pitiful life.

But the future I once dreamed of so great,

was just the beginning of a loving hate.

Reviews

[Demon-Lover]

This is amazing, it seems that you are writing from experience and letting your feelings flow. I really felt the heart ache near the end. Seriously this piece is amazing

[Not here]

thanks :) i appreciate it alot

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Beautiful write, David. And it shows the true struggles of relationships.

[Not here]

Thanks :) i noticed you been reviewing my stuff alot recently. i appreciate it

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful poem, David, loved it. :) Rudi

[Riley Justine]

Gorgeous poem that really shows the struggles of having a healthy relationship. Once again, an amazing piece.

[Demii]

Wow, I loved this, very relate able ! Relationships really aren't easy, I'm going on 3 years with my boyfriend.

[Not here]

hey thats awesome! congrats and thanks for reviewing

[Demii]

you're welcome!

[Mary Bradley]

Very interesting poem ... love and hate reside in the same heart in all of us

[Coyote Poetry]

My father had a great saying. (Love and hate. A heart beat apart).
"I honestly thought that she would be my wife
maybe even the center of my pitiful life.
But the future I once dreamed of so great,
was just the beginning of a loving hate."
Love is faith and will. We must know great faith in another for love to stay strong. I like and understand this poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Emily]

My favorite of yours!!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Not here]

Thanks emily :)

[Cool Girl]

This was amazing! Arguments can be hard.
They hurt so much, and they make you cry.
I'm sorry that this happened to you..
All couples have arguments at some point.
If it's true love, than you will overcome it.
Wait for your true love, David.
You'll meet her at some point in the future.
I promise you that everything will be alright.
And all your wishes shall come true..

Beautiful poem my dear friend.
Getting the emotions out can really help.
You will find happiness again though..
Trust me :)

[Ricky Campbell]

This is a great poem, with a touching message! I like your use of crooked rhyme, and the use of enjambment. Repeating a lot of the same rhymes over and over again gets a little annoying, and even though some of the rhyming ties this together, other bits of it tear it apart. If I were you, I would try free verse, it flows very smoothly in my eyes. Great poem though, and I would love to see more with emotion like this.