Rewind

I'm positive that positive

was once my middle name.

I'm sure of it that sure of it

was once my description. Fame

is not all it's choked up to be,

and to be honest I'm

getting sick and tired of

my endless, similar rhymes.

Go with the flow is the motto

they pressed into my head

so what do I do when the flow

is taking me to bed?

Weary, tired, sore and hurt

from all the lines I wrote.

If I could just find a sea,

I'd sail away on a boat.

I used to be so energetic,

certain and a little crazy.

Now a days, those lines I wrote

in the mirror look so hazy.

Did I really say those words?
Did I really shout?

After all my parents did,

what could I shout about?

My dad, yeah, he issues, sure,

but to be sure we all

have issues that we hide from others

until the day we fall.

Maybe we both have our days 

when fighting seem the best

option for us to display

our anger to the rest.

Preferably, I would prefer

to not fight any time.

Whenever we get into fights,

I let loose through crimes.

They're a different sort of crime,

mainly produced by words.

However, when wielded like that

words can soon become blurred.

What did I do to deserve this?

What ever can I say

to everybody I have hurt

Through all my actions. They

did not deserve to be treated

the way that I said. Lies

are all that came out of my mouth.

I'd rather Ten City dies.

I'd rather make another "Masterpiece"

or maybe "Breakthrough."

See, if I write another "Ten City"

I might just take you

to the places in my mind

you do not want to go.     

I'm sorry if your sad but     

you do not want to know!   

What lies behind these closed doors

are things you cannot see.       

What lies behind these closed doors                               

are things I hopefully will not be.

This is a sort of rewind,

a trip back to the past.

Trust me when I tell you,

it will not be the last.

Someday, sometime, somewhere

I will return to be

the best possible me that

I could possibly be.

Author's Note

Maybe these rhymes is more like my older poems, or maybe the theme is just like that. Whatever it is, I'm just reminiscing on those poems.

Reviews

[Emily]

I like the layout of it!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[zwartenkot]

Again, another fantastic peom i loved the rhyming and the way the peom in conveyed
Great job!

[Karen Arizona]

This is the second poem of yours I've read. I've got to say, your style of writing and choice of words are quite interesting to read. Your way of putting thoughts down on paper is the kind of writing I like to read. You have talent and I hope you will keep writing. Thanks for sharing.

[Not here]

thanks :) im planning on keeping writing

[613]

This was written very well. Each piece of writing you've created is similar, yet different. Every topic intertwines with one another. You really are a terrific writer. You'll certainly go far with this!

My only criticism: "My dad, yeah, he issues, sure," - I think you're missing a word here.

- Brittney

[closed]

a perfect write
the middle part of it is the best because it recounts your older works

it's like the turning point in a story
this seems to be about you coming to terms with who you were as an author

who you are

and who you're becoming


this was one of your best


-Dream

[Not here]

thanks :) im glad you like it

[Ilerah]

Love it, its well written. I like the middle part when your words get bigger, it adds a lot to the poem. Nicely done here

[Not here]

thanks thats the first time ive done that :)

[Ishita Dixit]

Someday, sometime, somewhere
I will return to be
the best possible me that
I could possibly be.
^favourite lines!
Great write! As always! :)

[Not here]

thanks :) im glad you liked them

[Haley Wilson]

Quite a change in atmosphere from the other poem I read of yours! Haha this one is much brighter and has a different yet wonderful flow to it. I like how you made some words bold and "louder" than others, it really emphasized the point you wanted to make. :)

[Not here]

thanks :) thats the first time ive done that

[Aerielle Louise]

Someday, sometime, somewhere
I will return to be
the best possible me that
I could possibly be.

I really like the lines above. Your poem seems to be Nostalgic, a trip back to the past. I love the way on how you ended the poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing such an amazing poetry.

[Not here]

thanks for commenting :)

[Aerielle Louise]

You're welcome :)

[Maumil Mehraj]

I love the positive tone of this poem, Justin. And it doesn't follow a strict rhyme scheme but it has a wonderful flow to it...
I'd love to read more of such poem from you
~Maumil

[Not here]

thanks :) this is what i was in the mood to write

[Maumil Mehraj]

Well honestly, I like this poem best so far.