Thank You to our soldiers in Iraq

This is in honor of America's troops coming home from Iraq

BOOM! Go the bombs

As the fires roar

And the bullets blast

Tanks lumber by

Their bulk intimidating,

But still they fight

Choppers soar overhead

Passengers survey the damage

Tears fall down their cheeks

before they join the battle

The steady rhythm of feet

Echoing throughout the land

As men march to their post

Protecting those in need of protection

The brave armies fight

Some men fall

But still they prevail

The fallen are honored

As their brothers and comrades

Fight in their name

The conflict lasts years

Heartbreak and hope everywhere

But finally, finally, the troops are coming home

The families are about to be reunited

And peace restored!

Thank you to all our troops who fought in Iraq!

Our hearts are with you.

We’re all so glad you’re coming home!

Author's Note

Please give me suggestions! I want this to be perfect! If words need to be changed, if I need to say something else, if I need anything, please tell me! This poem is special to me, and like I said before, please tell me what I need to do to fix it and make it better!

Reviews

[Calibaster]

Wow, that was a great tribute! The only thing that really annoyed me was that it didn't rhyme! but that's just me. by the way, thank you, is two words. ;) great job! keep up the good work! :) :)

[Dearantlers]

Thanks for the review! And you know that I can't write rhyming poems. :)

[Calibaster]

Aww, c'mon! give yerself the benefit of the doubt!! :) ;)

[Harley (arbiter)]

I salute our troops. This is just great. But not all of them arecoming home. We still have to leave some over there until things settle. The war is over but the battle has just begun

[Dean Kuch®]

..."tears fall down their cheek before they join the battle..."
That was one of the most powerful lines in this thought provoking poem. And, Oh, so true! Great write.

[joshua deathdealer]

I think it's nice. It's original and heartfelt with great visuals. Well done.

[Archia]

I like like there's almost different contrasts between war and coming home.

[Sarah]

very sad but so very true.

[Talia Renee]

It brought me to tears.

[PyroKitty24]

i think it sounds great! I wasn't expecting a poem honestly, but I liked it nonetheless. It was pretty and I think very honoring. My brother just got shipped off to Korea three days ago >.> he just got there today. That's what it reminded me of haha

[LunarSong]

Nice :)

[Freeminded]

I like the idea, though I think the rhythm is a little like a young child would right. If (as I see which competitions you entered it in) you wanted it to be amazing, I would consider the rhythm...but thats just me