Sweet Marionette

S trings play on the violin, the sweet marionette dances

W alking across the tiny stage she comes to life

E very evening as she puts on her show

E very eye is on her as she sings her sweet melodies

T onight she shines her magic to her audience

 

M arionette

A m I to you

R each out for my strings

I can fly without having wings

O n this stage you have set me

N ot sure where I stand at any given time

E venings you spend with me at your own leisure

T he violins play each night a different tune

T he stage becomes dark with despair

E ach time you leave me alone

 

Reviews

[Sam]

"T he stage becomes dark with despair

E ach time you leave me alone"

I like these two lines, they're sweet, its a shame they don't rhyme and climax the poem.

[Fran Marie]

A great Acostic poem~ a form you have mastered quite well

Well DonE! for this contest my friend!~Fran

[LadyLove]

How sad she is when the show is over! She seems to love her existence as a simple marrionette. I think she loves the one who brings her to life. She seems to be more with him. It's almost spiritual in tone not knowing where she will be yet loving still who leads her. Nice!

[Justin Tobey]

I like it! I still has the whimsical feel that many of your acrostics do, but it has a hint of sadness, adding emotional depth. I like it a lot! :D Great write!

[Carole]

You just have a way with acrostic poems, Debileah! Another masterpiece! Thanks for sharing!

[DRIVEN]

An acrostic poem is always a challenge and fun to write...good job

[George Love]

Well done and interesting style here. Very creative!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like the way you divided the poem into two stanzas: the first about a true marionette and the second the metaphoric one.

Good going!

Sal

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

different from your usual, there's a hit of sadness, yet you can fly without wings gives this poem hope and joy.

I liked as usual good work.