ostrich eyes

drop the subtext

of all things everywhere, what matters most is now..

linguistics and heuristics:

more than statistics;

a moment measures might

when it's more than a fight.

--move towards the light.

reality decided by your thoughts and words

with that look on your face, i know u think it's absurd.

once again your a victim, and i don't have to say

the dungeon you sleep in, you paved your own way

a million little choices, like a pebble or stone

you pile 'em in your pocket, now your feel'n

the load;

but, 

don't you think it's stupid you should take such offense,

didn't feel it come'n now you're hit'n the road,

you "find" the need to explode--

how's the whole ostrich surprise

couldn't see the punch, 

 too busy close'n ur eyes,

and like the words that burned you 

and that sorry look of despise,

i can't be there to guide you if 

you gouge me with lies--

tell me}

          : the dungeon won't hold you no more,

          : you find no need to settle the score,

          : get the gumption, lay it down on the floor,

-i've seen it before-

Reviews

[heido]

I'm usually not fond of rhyming poetry, I feel like the content can suffer from being boxed into what word has to rhyme with which. You however have managed to maintain form and not lose content. Something I can't do. Or fail to all the time atleast.

I enjoyed this.

[Dylan Macadham]

Thanks Di,
You've lightened the load I've been pocketing.
Kudos! ... wish I'd written it :)
Dylan

[TheWriter]

Def. One Of My Favorites That You've Written!!

[kait]

this is really good i like it

[Siddhartha]

wow...this feels like poetry with bombs and explosions...wonderful stuff...the didactic tone, i sometimes don't like...but it works wonders here...

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Lot of action words here. This could work well as a Slam, no? You have a gift. This old fart needs to get used to the way your words roll. Nice poem!
Peace

[Katie Louise Hughes]

oooo this is cool! like a beat poem almost! *snaps :) I liked it - ostrich in the title makes it interesting too!

[nono]

This is something beautiful something interesting keep it up! I like this so descriptive and different from what people normally read about!