Sweet Agony

For the Sugar and Pain contest

Taste fruition
Of sugary sand melting
On my tongue, delicately
Teasing my senses.
Heavenly, sweet surrender,
A tender bite of
Confectionery bliss.
Hell
Explodes inside my head

Author's Note

A pain that tastes so good.

Reviews

[OT]

LOL! the pain of toothache indeed haha - I loved the irony of the acrostic word and then the lines ha - nice!

[Gomer LePoet]

It's a sad choice huh? do I give up my sweets, or do I give up my teeth? fun play here

[LA Lorena]

LOL! Acrostic! You don't see too many of these. Bravo! This is great.

[Robin]

perfect penned pain

[Dream Weaver]

Oh do I know this well...
Sugar and spice and everything
nice = hell on enamel...

[Matthew Kult]

Sweet Agony indeed. Oh how the bliss turns a poor diabetic into a blob on the er table. If only I could have candy....


Great write.

Matthew

[Jess Holden]

Oh my word, thats absolutly an amazing poem!!! Amazing format!!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A very good acrostic. I enjoyed.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I think that was awesome. It was an excellent contrast between the short term gratification of candy and the future excruciating price to be paid. I thoroughly enjoyed.