Hope is Present

Sky toned with azure
Hid by the darkest of clouds
Below such, no peace,
Yet one would wish for freedom.
Ray of light touches the earth.

Reviews

[Simphonia Hale]

I agree with Mr. Orton. Very deep. :) Nicely done!

[Wórdsmíth]

well, your words are powerful. Deeply written.

[Eileenws]

I agree with the others. The changes make it flow smoothly. Nicely done.

[Eileenws]

Congratulations on your 2nd place finish!

[Helena]

Very nice descriptive Tanka. Well done! Thank you for both submissions to the Tanka contest.

Cheers,

Helena

[Marie]

I would suggest "Sky toned with azure/Hid by the darkest clouds...

All in all, not a bad little poem.

[Monster ^.^]

I'd try that, thanks! :)

[Toni]

Beautiful!