kiss a rose

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Kiss a rose

As a young rose, I had my thorns

There was so much I wanted to see

By those inner demons with horns

But my guardian angels were beside me

 

Now my lonely heart is eaten by worms

It is turning from red into a rusty maroon

Nightmares are taking on new forms

And my life is burning out soon

 

Someone, anyone kiss my lips

Wake me, save me from this nightmare

This thief that only kills and rips

Dreams in a way that is unfair

 

I will show you my dreams

And share my life with you

It will be all what I want to seize

To live a life that is happy and true

 

 

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed

Reviews

[Ross Saunders]

Very nice, the personification you give to the rose is great. The emotions work beautifully and progress at a solid pace through the cycle the poem is presenting. You've got a great rhythm and structure here, one that flows perfectly.

[bluessadmood]

ohh this is just great ..what lovely feelings and emotions..bursting
i was young and had my so many thorns,wanted much to see and have
now my heart eaten bu time passing..its turning to rust,nightmares killing me
my lifelike burning itself away and its too soon..somebody anyone just kiss me
wake me save me ..this thief is killing my soul,before time..dreams slipping away
i will show you my dreams,my life my soul, give you my all life,just want to be happy..and true
lovely and perfect..just loved the words..how i love them when they are full of life..your words
lovely write..

[Iota]

I see in this poem the cycle of life and the rose is holding on at the end not enjoying old age. the fairytale is with one kiss it can regain it's youth back. Very nice writing.

[Elmehdi Adlany]

I'd share Coyote the same opinion, but I'd like to add that I liked the use of Rose/Thorns, it's too much realistic and painful, yet melodramatic. Good!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. A modern fairy tale in a sense. To be brought alive by a single kiss. I like the description and the ending. A outstanding poem.

[deeps]

This is wonderful started out kind of dark ended up quite beuatiful.
I like this and the rhyme scheme. Very well written.