NIGHT HORROR'S!

A poem i wrote, about my boyfriend and hes experience when he was a child.

Have you ever heard a story so scary and so true,

About a little boy around the age of two...

One that gives you such chills you cant help but shake,

One the leaves you in bed at night laying wide eyed and awake....

I have for you a tale so scary and so true,

About a little boy around the age of two.

He's my boyfriend, and his story makes me shake,

for when he was little he sat in bed wide awake...

He still isn't sure weather

he was awake or asleep,

All he knows is it was at night

when they would begin to creep.

He heard the knock each and every night on hes window pain,

Thats when he knew they where here once again.

He couldn't scream for he had no voice,

He couldnt move he was held down without choice.

They would whisper things he now cant re call,

all he knows is they whernt friendly at all.

He saw everything from demons to the devil,

to anything you can name on any level.

Each and every night the night horror's would dance,

As this poor little boy was cought in there trance.

Until finaly one day he gave a shout,

As he smiled with joy hed worked something out.

This football mascot poster with a creepy smile,

had triggered this to happen for a very long while.

So what this little boy did is he took that poster down,

That would have made those night horrors frown.

For that little boy is now less afraid,

close's hes eyes at night without fear.

the night horrors are now chased away,

for they no longer appear here.

Now you have heard a story so scary and so true,

about my guy, when he was little, around the age of two.

This story i bet made you quiver and shake,

I bet its you tonight who lays in bed wide eyed and awake.

Reviews

[mark]

this is really good babe u wrote a whole poem about my nightmares just by me telling you about it. didnt think it would turn out this great. i like it its a really good poem. i cant believe what i had to go through it scared the s**t out of me everynight i went to sleep. great write about MY nightmare lol. u can write about anything ur a natural :) i love you hehe xxxooo

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Im glad you liked it hun :) I cant begin to imagine what you went though, i would be s**t scared at my age if that happened to me and you were just a little boy.... STILL ARE :p
Thanks hun means allot i have improved heaps since i started writing :) i love you to mwa xxxooo

[mark]

smartass :P your welcome haha :)

[Average person]

Creepy ... I like it! :) very good!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thank you :) glad you liked it :)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Oooh that's really good! And really creepy!!! That's crazy that really happened o_O But I actually enjoyed this! :P

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yer pretty scary thing for my boyfriend to go through..... Thanks glad you enjoyed it :)

[❤ Maggie ❤]

I'm sure..anytime:)

[BubblingMe]

It was cool I like how it rhymes!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks you :)

[BubblingMe]

Your welcome anytime:-)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Cimmy, I'm impressed. I see major improvements in how you construct your poems. You learn quickly! ;)

I love the repetitions of "Have you ever heard a story so scary and so true,
About a little boy around the age of two..." which were done in effective moderation. The rhymes are commendable as well. One of the common blunders of poets is to write cliches and end lines with usually-paired-rhymes, and I can say that you have quite overcome that. Some misspelled words can be seen in your poems but I know that you can correct them. :) Best wishes, Cimmy!! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you blue, im glad im improving even more, i noticed since i have had this sight, my poetry has gotten much better, i guess because im writing more then i use to :)

Thanks so much blue i love your reviews, im always so glad that you like my stuff :) Thats a problem i have long been working on my spelling kind of sucks, always has haha. I know ill have to fix that if i ever want to publish any sort of book.
Thanks again for your review :)

[zaneybear]

this is actually a really good piece!! just got confusing with the "hes" and the "his" in the first few stanzas I could be reading it completely wrong but im just wondering because it is an amazing piece! very well! keep writing:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Yer my boyfriend keeps correcting me on that one to ill fix it up haha. No your not its my spelling haha :P Thanks for your review so glad you enjoyed it :)

[annabellee]

that is definitley a good poem. Very good flow and a good stroy that captures you. I really wanted to find out what was going on.
Great write :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks Anna for ur wonderful as ever review. Im glad you enjoyed it :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Riding the Rainbow]

Very scary nights for your boyfriend...thinking that he was just 2 y.o. makes me sad..he was terrified and with reasons...
You did a very good job writing everything down..

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

well around two lol, two just rhymed with true but yer he was only a kid, i cant begin to imagine what that would have been like. '
Thanks for the review and for liking it :)