reconnoitering with the regrets

reconnoitering with the regrets 

 

 

drab notice,

in the certain trees

a foliage of faces,

memories of lovers branching into atmosphere

 

there is too much gray

in a background of tearful joy,

just to have loved is like a soft rain

but tears slammed to the ground

are reminders of raging what if's

 

i want blue

but a different blue

not the sardonic effort of sad pens

but the blue that holds my sky in its hands

reminiscing with a sympathetic sun

 

that understands

the roots of the relationships

that grew me into who i am

 

a floral contingent of green fading into silver,

into gold,

 

about to leave the tree

understanding the need to let go.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/26/15

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

A seemingly endless array of the pens poetic power. Regret yes but told in a way that suffers the beauty of sorrow.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

this is why I would never go back in age ... we learn things ..important things .. like embracing pain and loss as it mixes with a subtle peace and contentment ... and like letting go ;) really like the tree and leaves ...
E.
ps your title is very catchy :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.

j.

[Solar]

I like the reconnaisance - the shades of regret maturing as the poem leaves the reader enriched.

The continuity of the imagery and the changing tempo in the sounds captures the mood beautifully.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Solar.
j.

[B]

I see so much here
the need for peace
and good times

in the same instance of observing a relationship hit the ground by itself
one just wishes for distance

so the other side can realize a new form of blue
i seen this color play here as magnetic
A need for a place of relinquishment with this partner

To just be at peace together

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your poetic reply...and insights...Nisreen.

j.

[Tom]

The disappointment of one too many unfulfilled, unsatisfactory relationships take their toll, lingering long in the human psyche, especially when it could/should have been much better !

A candidly discerning write Jacob penned with poignant, reflective yearning !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Tom.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

I found the third stanza unusually striking, the notion of a "sympathetic sun", the stanza as a whole providing a bit of an about-face in the piece's point of view, doing so with a splendid subtlety. It's something that, in lesser hands, could have been quite jarring or abrupt, but you've got Rizzuto hands going there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah the Scooter...one of my favorite players and announcers for my Yanks...thank you for your kind words, W.k.....

j.

[jesserose99]

I love the wisdom with which you write Jacob! Really inspiring. the picture you paint to is a beautiful one, of the soul and it's process of being connected to its past relationships and needing to part from them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, jesserose...
j.

[...]

Excellent...and I LOVE that 3rd stanza, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.
j.

[redzone]

"letting go" of "regrets" is one thing, and important thing for one's sanity and well being... but I read a finality in your words Jacob, as if the person sees the need to "let go" of the tree of life, a leaf that has come to its end... or on a happier note, the need to let go of regrets and thus stay alive, since they were pulling him down...

I know you always say that the reader interprets a poem from their own perspective... yes, but it is also true that we want the reader to see what we are saying, to communicate... so I hope I have not messed with your poem Jacob, especially since it is a "reconnoitering"... we may not be able to change the past, but we do not have to be slaves to the future... one of the benefits of a conscience mind unique in this world...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your very insightful review, Curt...thank you for your words,

j.

[alifeacoustic]

Love this Jacob. The foliage of us, ever changing and like the seasons, move on without us noticing the small differences, until we see the creases and the fuller picture of what we were and what we now are.
Beautifully written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, alife.
j.