a tryst indited in senryu

a tryst indited in senryu

second degree burns

from your consummate  kisses

lips don't want to heal

exploratory

arriving at your neckline

advancing to depths

the maneuvering 

balanced near the precipice

i fall into you

sighs and cigarettes

smoke rings of contentment waft

moments replayed

erin-cilberto

7/24/17

Reviews

[Cassie]

This is so mature and i love the way you have put it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this Jacob
Exquisite

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

and what a pleasant fall it is J, hopefully free fall!! A sensual poem uniquely yours J and so tastefully done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Fanning myself.....exploratory kisses at the neckline....be still my heart! Great senryus here. very sensual and at the same time elegant. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha..thank you, Lydi.
j.

[ms. barrie]

all three are exquisitely sensuous. i'm always in awe and inspired by your poetic gifts. thank you for sharing
-- xx --

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, barrie...
j.

[ms. barrie]

you're most welcome, jacob

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed three seneru which stand alone but when conjoined tell a steaming hot tail of lustful moments shared.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John.

j.

[KWP]

oooooh Jacob - you have inspired me - love each and every stanza/senryu - so clever - it has a downward motion - falling so happily into bliss X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KWP...
j.

[DIVYA]

So beautifully done. All the senryus hold great sway on their own and together!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA...
j.

[Bacchus]

I feel like you only have a
polariod of this lady...
the smoke rings makes me
want a cigar...
thanks a lot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so you like cigars, eh?

never could handle them...liked a pipe every so often..
thank you for your visit and words, Bacchus.
j.

[Zugzwang]

Great senryu!
Those short form are fun to write in aren't they?
I liked the idea of a senryu sequence on a romantic tryst. It was kind of like a super condensed mini series.
I got a sense of playfulness from this poem, along with tbe passion, so there was a sense of lightness to go along with the heavy petting.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Zugzwang....
j.