a tryst indited in senryu

a tryst indited in senryu

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

a tryst indited in senryu



second degree burns
from your consummate  kisses
lips don't want to heal



exploratory
arriving at your neckline
advancing to depths



the maneuvering 
balanced near the precipice
i fall into you


sighs and cigarettes
smoke rings of contentment waft
moments replayed



erin-cilberto
7/24/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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This is so mature and i love the way you have put it

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you, Cassie,
j.
Love this Jacob
Exquisite

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.
and what a pleasant fall it is J, hopefully free fall!! A sensual poem uniquely yours J and so tastefully done.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.
Fanning myself.....exploratory kisses at the neckline....be still my heart! Great senryus here. very sensual and at the same time elegant. Lydi**

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

ha ha..thank you, Lydi.
j.
all three are exquisitely sensuous. i'm always in awe and inspired by your poetic gifts. thank you for sharing
-- xx --

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind words, barrie...
j.
ms. barrie

2 Months Ago

you're most welcome, jacob
Indeed three seneru which stand alone but when conjoined tell a steaming hot tail of lustful moments shared.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you, John.

j.
oooooh Jacob - you have inspired me - love each and every stanza/senryu - so clever - it has a downward motion - falling so happily into bliss X

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, KWP...
j.
So beautifully done. All the senryus hold great sway on their own and together!

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA...
j.
I feel like you only have a
polariod of this lady...
the smoke rings makes me
want a cigar...
thanks a lot.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

so you like cigars, eh?

never could handle them...liked a pipe every so often..
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Great senryu!
Those short form are fun to write in aren't they?
I liked the idea of a senryu sequence on a romantic tryst. It was kind of like a super condensed mini series.
I got a sense of playfulness from this poem, along with tbe passion, so there was a sense of lightness to go along with the heavy petting.

Posted 2 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Months Ago

thank you for your words, Zugzwang....
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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