too long to ask, too long to accept

too long to ask, too long to accept

 

 

 

stagnant goodbyes

left on mossy lips

death from words

unspoken,

actions cause love to commit suicide

by inaction

 

delicious hate becomes the entree

we perpetuate the longing to exit

and finally set fire to the dance

 

steps of retreat,

a beat of sorts

one long waltz 

 

and done.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/22/18

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

Is it kind of like the Samba? I don't want to do that dance, Jacob. This is pretty dark, but almost every ending is that way, right? A darkness before the light. Done, but new beginning. Great words man! CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for taking the time to read and review this piece, CD...not sure it worked very well, very few comments on it.
j.

[CD Campbell]

I think some poems make people uncomfortable, Jacob. Not every write is suppose to be a rainbow. Peoples taste ebb and flow, that's a fact.

[DIVYA]

I truly believe feelings die due to lack of admission. Hate follows naturally. The dance is ruined. Appreciated so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA...
j.