bottle of next time

bottle of next time

 

 

exposed affections,
cheeks explode crimson embarrassment
eyes defect
hide in dark brown retina
beleaguered heart kisses another potential 
goodbye
before the hello is registered

shy flowers close buds under intrusive sun
reopening unavailable
until next spring,
and still that is an uneven
conclusion 

when balance renders itself
as steady as a wino's dance.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/7/18

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

"shy flowers close buds under intrusive sun
reopening unavailable"

Two fabulous lines here to sum up the awkwardness of this situation. I am left thinking, better luck next time. I love to read free verse when it is well penned.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Christine.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Balance is so important for everything in life we need it to think and act right- sometimes it requires unbalance to balance us and at times an unbalancing of emotions leads us to places we need to go and experience- love the words another potential goodbye- seem to be many out there - but those that are meant to stay will and those that are meant to be part of your life will always find a way back no matter what- beautiful thoughts and words🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, and kind review, Kelly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure and how could I not appreciate these wonderful words🌹

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Your work astounds me
As usual
I’m not even fit to be in this site when I read poets such as you and others

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Julie.
j.

[lightsong]

the first words came to my mind reading Your first words was (nightclub), and to me it felt like a love story in a nightclub, something You can have, but it's not Yours, the tenderness Your second verse carried was really wonderful, it spoke the truth... that a prostitute is a woman, she can be shy... she can choose, she can want and doesn't want, and she can open or not... even Your next verse apply to all women, and girls, and within it I see more too, a desire that is burning inside a man, and a girl whom is still unwilling to go along with that desire, so yes until next time... or the next one or even after who knows?

maybe I gone far with my conclusions but it's what Your words left inside my mind, it's always something interesting the imagination You have, and Your talented ability to paint Your pages from it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love your interpretation and appreciate your words very much, Light...thank you.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Lots of ideas on this one J. I see bad luck on the throes of love but better luck next time, then I see a a few drinks consumed to pluck up the confidence to ask one on an adventure of love dating!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew, appreciate your words.
j.