freezing my insolence to the keys

freezing my insolence to the keys

you chided me on my free verse

asked if i knew what meter is

my reply, of course

was that it was that thing into which

i place quarters to park my car

you said i drove you crazy

with my metaphors and random rhyme

i gave you the name of a good poet therapist

who counsels on violation of form

but she is impossible to call

because after all

emily dickinson is more than one hundred years

removed from this earth

and this poem doesn't rhyme either

so sue me if you intend

my poetic existence does not depend

on your acceptance

or your rejection

just the injection

of words on white blankets

warming themselves to a reader's heart

so if you don't mind, 

allow me my leave

i must retrieve

my car

before my meter runs out

and my words get towed

for breach of time.

erin-cilberto

4/10/18

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A witty write and I smiled that you had been chided for the lack of rhyme and rhythm in your writing, by a novice. It works the other way round as well, similar has happened to me." It would be better written in free verse." I say, choose your style and go for it. Over time styles alter anyway. Your final two stanzas, funny. An amusing read, fun. Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Christine.
j.

[Paul Bell]

Not enough meter in the meter.
But change is just a drive away.
Spade in the trunk. Hope Emily doesn't mind the violation.
Sure she'll be alright with it.
Poets should stick together.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we should, Paul...definitely.
thank you,
j.

[Ardra]

Mmm I think you are so well versed with poetry( with the limited knowledge of poems)
So I guess this is a good reply for those who don't understand words...if they make a difference to the readers that's what matters ...not the forms...the meters..and all other things...your poems always touch my heart... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ria.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

classic jacob!
if you need any change, i seriously doubt it, i have a jar of coins for the meter.

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for the offer, i never carry change around with me...:)

[Lydia Shutter]

FANTASTIC!!! I have been chided for not rhyming and then for rhyming too. Everyone believes they are a critic. Love the clever play on the word "meter".....and the scattered rhymes I found in this one whether intended or not. Jacob, your poetry never disappoints. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Lydi.
j.