Final Straw

Final Straw

A Poem by audrie

the jitters were the final straw
the pacing was the final straw
the egotistical visions 
final straw
the cockroaches
final straw
the s**t on the was 
final straw
the oatmeal on the kitchen floor to feed the bugs
final straw
the invented laser especially made for the government
final straw
the chewing tobacco
final straw
the gold chains around your nekck
final straw
working for the CIA 
final straw
shoving food into your mouth
final straw
it's all about you 
and the tings you do
that was the final straw

© 2014 audrie



Author's Note

audrie
This all happened one night when I went on a date with a schizophrenic guy who wasn't taking his medication. . . it was so very interesting!

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Oh wow, not funny, I know but jeez, must have been interesting.
Good write. Pretty intense.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Craziest date EVER - but I'm glad I had the experience - thanks for the comment
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Pax
intriguing piece, the repetition made it more mysterious and the life it shows brings many abstract imagery. very nice my friend...



Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Why thank you my friend
Pax

3 Years Ago

welcome :)
Interesting indeed!! A fun read that's a bit out there, fantastic!

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

yes - the date was a bit out there also!
This is crazy funny wow, nice poem. I bet it was an interesting date!

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

ha ha! Funny now but really creepy the night I went out with him - I had absolutely no idea how cra.. read more
there is humor and heaviness mixed so nicely together in this love/hate poem...



Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

I made it through that night alive - he really had me nervous - Thanks for the review
Funny.... Great read dear.... You are just fantastic.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Ahh - thanks! and thanks for reading it , I'm glad you liked it. It is one of my favorite poems
This sounds like a wild ride. I would have loved to have been a fly on the wall for that date!

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

yes, indeed - this was one of the most interesting nights that I have ever had!

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