Come With Me

 

 

 

Come away with me and I'll show you happiness

Take my hand friend to a place where our soul can rest

Lay yourself and stay awhile

Feel it take you in and lift your sigh into a smile

 

Come with me to a place I call home

I promise that you will never feel alone

Let your dreams become real

And welcome in what you feel

 

Come with me and dance like a child

Let your body go wild

Make the song in your head take you away

For if you come with me forever your happiness will stay

 

Come with me and follow your feet

They will turn your pleasure on repeat

And as you tingle from your head to your toes

You'll understand this place no one knows

 

Come with me and play your game

Where you are different and never the same

And after then you'll see from the start

That this wonderful place you followed me to is your heart

Author's Note

:) Enjoy my friends

Reviews

[United Writings]

Erin,
I dont know what else to say but Wow... wonderful write i love it.
I wish i would have wrote it but then again then i would be able to read and review a piece like this and hopefully give a heart felt review. The funny thing is is that i have just watched a movie that i really like it was called What Dreams May Come with Robin Willams. If you have not seen it already I personally recommend you watch and enjoy anyways back on track , This poem leaves me in a stae of mind that i would never want to leave but then again have no reason that tells me i can stay. I totally understand and really like where your coming from. I felt that since no one else actually took the time to actually write a lengthy review I would. If I Could Rate It Which this poem is not supposed to be rated and You dont want it rated iwould still give it a 100 out of100

Thank You once again,

Promisekeeper

[Tara Jean Olson]

i love the concept! it is different. that is what i favor.

This is beautiful! I think this would make a great song! I feel you are very talented. How can I, who is not that talented, review your writing? Great work!

[smiggle wiggle]

omg this is amazing! great job!

[forfila]

Awwwe Erin this is beautiful and outstanding, such a sweet, deep an profound meaning. I will favor this I think =)

[Fran Marie]

A most enjoyable read so well penned~THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[Travis Lawrence]

This certainly made me smile! Thank you for sharing, Erin :-)

-Travis

[J.P.O.et]

I like this a lot Erin
Def flows and I like your sentiment
'Come with me and follow your feet
They will turn your pleasure on repeat'
I like that, sounds fun, and love the last verse
Nice :)

J.P.O.et

[stipe]

and enjoy i did, it even made me smile!!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Come with me and play your game
Where you are different and never the same
And after then you'll see from the start
That this wonderful place you followed me to is your heart"

Damn! I loved this one..Too good I must say, Awesome indeed
Very beautifully written with such an impressive flow and such gentle feel!
Too good!
And I loved the last lines the most..It just like piles up your every emotion behind this write!
Amazing work! :)

[DeAn]

very cool indeed. love the tease towards a fantasyland and the end being the heart. very geniusly played and thought out. I loved this Erin!

great job!

l8r g8r
-Tao