Tanglelations

"Oh what a tangled web we weave, when first we practice to deceive!" Sir Walter Scott

the tangled webs,

 the contempt, the deceit

caught up in a hurricane

 of dark lies

strangling the daylights

 out of more than one

it climbs and clings 

until the life source is gone

cut off for all involved

 and spinning over onto others

little white ones to deceive

 sans pain flips the corner,

turning overs pebbles to boulders

 until all is unearthed

turmoil and pain of daggers

 with poison darts

they hit the heart

 with accuracy  and precision 

even shot in the dark 

they leave scars that split open trust

always an issue in the aftermath

 to take that flight again

like toy soldiers everyone affected

          falls down one after another

arrows flung in painful deception

               hit the spot and leave their mark

Reviews

[Jamie Cook]

You blew through me like bullet holes, left stains on my sheets and stains on my soul.....yeah this poem was really relatable when the fine fibers of trust were destroyed and then you discover something completely different about the person. Your poem was swift and flowing but it was also containing so much in its lines, you're an amazing writer Frieda. I loved it voot voot :D

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jamie, hope i didn't do too much damage ;-)

[Jamie Cook]

On no no no ^-^ I was happy to read this :)

[Frieda P]

From what i hear, bullet holes can be painful, thanks again! ;-)

[Jamie Cook]

Yeah they can be and yes of course; welcome

[KAOlmsted]

This is why I don't lie. Well, this and I have the worst memory; I'd screw it all up. Well done, Aunt Frieda xD

[Frieda P]

Also because you're a straight shooter, tell my niece I said 'ciao' ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

She stayed home "sick" again from school today, the little faker. I better put her to bed earlier tonight.

[Frieda P]

She probably just wanted to hang out with the lot of us...give her buttefly kisses!

[KAOlmsted]

She watched me write one of your reviews and she went "100 rating?" And I siad, "Yeah." And she said, "Is that why you wrote 'great stuff'?" And I was like, "Yeah." And then she fucked off and played with her new camera xD

[Frieda P]

Ha just watch she's not pointing that new plaything at you whilst in that hottub! xD

[KAOlmsted]

Mama has her own camera for that ;-)

[Frieda P]

Lol, I should have known! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Deron Alexis]

this was your usual epicness every time i'm about to click a link from you i prepare to be blown away well done Frieda

[Frieda P]

Woo jiving on this review, thanks so much Deron!

[Angel of Heart's]

Powerfully conveyed and serves a good warning to unsuspecting hearts... you painted this with conviction and style Frieda :)
BRAVO!!
You stir the darkness very well my friend!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Angel, coming from one who stirs epic, that's a great review!

[Claire Twinn]

A great extension of Scott's poem, the lies eventually suffocating and killing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Claire, that's an awesome compliment.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Quin has said it all.

[Frieda P]

You said that last time.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Damn he's good!

[kublakhan27]

Another element of your style has just become apparent to me...it was always there in the back of my mind but I never really thought to point it out till now...more often than not, an erotic piece is quickly followed by a dark counterpart...this piece reminded me of Blake, who wrote a volume of poetry (Songs of innocence and experience) that pitted identical themes against each other in two different poetic contexts...the way in which you do this is a testament to your own literary prowess, and makes the sentiments of each "opposing" piece all the more explicit...great work :)

[Frieda P]

Was it necessary to say that out loud? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I cannot keep brilliance I secret ;)

[kublakhan27]

or A secret for that matter...

[Renée]

Unpleasant subject but expressed very well... trust is such a precious gift..I can not understand deception....

[Frieda P]

Me either Renee, thanks so much for your review.

[s y e]

I guess that once someone has lied to you, let you down and whatever else that it's hard to trust them again, I for one know that. Many people have lied to me and gaining their trust for me, is a challenge. There is very little people that I trust because I have been let down a lot, this is a poem that has been very well written and speaks the truth, ha.

"arrows flung in painful deception
hit the spot and leave their mark"

These lines for me hit the mark, they are so true and you speak so much truth in this poem. Lovely write, as always from you hun.

[Frieda P]

I know I'm not the only one who lived through deceptive lies....it's very callous and definitely leaves a scar....thanks hun. x

[s y e]

Yeah it does a leave a scar for sure!
I'm your featured review! Woopie! xox

[quinfinn]

having read and absorbed this i have come to the conclusion that you have experienced too much winter in your life. i have read many of your introspective and emotionally charged writes, but this one is deeply disturbing to me. maybe it is because i have grown close to you and feel your pain. maybe it is because you embrace your pain entirely too well for your own good. there is much summer left in your life,Frieda, reach for it and stay on vacation...your heart and mind deserve the rest and relaxation. it is good that you exhale the bad air through these poignant and touching writes. now, take a deep breath and think of a field full of beautiful posies (i know you love posies) and a gentle, warm breeze. you are sitting on a blanket with a carafe of your favorite wine and the person you love most in the whole of your human experience. go there with them and spend some quality time. you really know how to touch people with your poetry, girl.

[quinfinn]

guess you didn't like this review....or missed it somehow?