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Disconnected Dreaming

Disconnected Dreaming

A Poem by Frieda P


Was I flying or
 was it, dying
in my dreams
          upon your soul

I was suspended in
 your lusty web
my heart and head
                                     disconnected

As I fell back to earth
 to find
there was
 no reason
           or rhyme
just shattered notions 
of love's emotions







© 2013 Frieda P



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Whew! I hope that was wonderful dream before disconnection as we have climax after interval in every movie :P
Just kidding dearie :) this is just a traveller from one world to another and you got me travelling from place to place with your word play here :)
Simply amazing and as usual Frieda got Karizmatic way of expressing with outstanding Calibre of executing the way which you always do :)
- Singh :)
100/100..... Just give me more opportunities to read such wonderful poems from you my dear buddie :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Wooo, that's some review Singh, I'm going to have it bronzed and hang it on my wall! ;-) Thanks muc.. read more
Vikrantsingh

4 Years Ago

Sure you can do one for me atleast this thing will give me some boost to review all your poetry with.. read more



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I still envy hands that can put such depth in so few lines... it was a quick read, but it sits on your shoulders when you're done. Well done!

Posted 4 Years Ago


heart and head disconnected - a spiders web - the stuff of dreams and deeper nightmares. Well penned.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Falling from love, rather than in (although some would debate that they're the same thing).
How grieving a topic, to know once you resided in the heavens only to descend back into reality.. well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


What I always note is the excellent way Frieda phrases...a perfect tempo, enjambment always finely tuned, very good...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Thanks for your glowing review Leslie, muchly appreciated.
wow Frieda... I loved this piece, awesome job!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Put a smile on my face Leandro, thanks!
Nicely done. I know you claim not to rhyme but here you did it well. And while I am not usually a fan of tricks like odd spacing or typesetting here the offset "disconnected" worked very well to jar the reader.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Thanks Steve, you're right, sometimes it just happens to sneak by me though and it works...glad you .. read more
Nice write, Frieda. The meaning is clear but artistically expressed. I read it a few times, really enjoyable.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Thanks Pryde, a few times, what an honor....
Woah woah woah, I saw a few rhymes in there ;) that's not a Frieda piece!?!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Laughing here, believe me it was hardly planned! Thanks Annabelle, glad you liked my rhyme attempt!.. read more
I think Jim Morrison said it best, "When the musics over, turn out the lights". That dance that sweeps you off your feet, and you think your flying can feel cheap as buying a ticket to ride and only getting to go around once, when you realize it was never a true tango but more of a shuffling of feet. I like this one, as heartbreaking as it may be.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Woo Astro, your review is music to my ears...thanks so much!
Astro

4 Years Ago

You're welcome Frieda.
Frieda - you've done it again - Speechless

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Awh thanks Tarry, I need to visit your page soon, catching up on RR's since I was gone...
Tarry Franck

4 Years Ago

Thanks Frieda - I need to do the same with yours

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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