The Woods. The Allure.

The Woods. The Allure.

A Poem by Rufio The Jedi

 

I tell her my emotions are naked

Hold me

In your arms is the only place I feel safe dreaming

Let the trees sing lullabies from the windows

Let the grass grow between our toes in the bed

Someone in the clouds whispers

Sweet nothings in my ear

I pass the message

The blankets twist and swallow our bodies

They are monsters

We are naïve

We wander in the woods alone

 


© 2009 Rufio The Jedi



Author's Note

Rufio The Jedi
typos:

fell was feel

wonder was wander

sorry, and thank you emily.

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and passions rise to kiss the morning dew....from the tips of our fingers traced anew...and each day forth our love ensues...as I wipe the brow of my beloved muse....

I did too enjoy this and thank you for the ideas of...."Let the trees sing lullabies from the windows", which only lover's could hear...

Posted 8 Years Ago


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n your arms is the only place I feel safe dreaming

Let the trees sing lullabies from the windows

Let the grass grow between our toes in the bed---------this was my favorite part...vivid, and different writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


and passions rise to kiss the morning dew....from the tips of our fingers traced anew...and each day forth our love ensues...as I wipe the brow of my beloved muse....

I did too enjoy this and thank you for the ideas of...."Let the trees sing lullabies from the windows", which only lover's could hear...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh, and how that captivates me!
--such wonderfully encapsulated thoughts
ah, to be nave ... fearless too
I think the order of lines two and three add a kind of desperate impact too
good write
...and thank *you* for sharing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah, the beast with two backs...the odd juxtapositons abound: "f**k me" and two youngsters walking in the woods like Hansel and Gretel, monsters and lullabies. These things should not go together, in theory, but you've woven them together effectively and artfully. This is some very, very fine writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yea, you've got a lot of potential, man..just not too much sex..save some for your later years..trust me..ha

you've described the post-coital experience phenomenally..kudos, as they say on the myspace.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Two little things and then I will tell you how wonderful it all is:
1--I feel safe dreaming not fell, typo?
2--We wander, well it did seem like a thing a minute ago, wonder may do just as well at that.

It is wonderful. I love the way your voice sings off the page. Maybe it was a whisper. Maybe it was a shout. I've got to go share this with somebody. :) I think it's another favorite.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great--beautiful imagery, but the vulgar language detracts from it a bit.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

"I pass the message
The blankets twist and swallow our bodies"

This was great!! You're a very talented writer.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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