I Hear Your Music, And Swoons Me

Long distance...

 

 

 

All those I think I thought I loved

live beyond the edge

of my vision’s meekness.

 

A weekend passes, I see,

then days and decades

of lonesome poems too,

 

like smoke rings

float wholly

in time and air

 

evanesce between

the see-through space,

of which we take breaths.

 

I hear your music

through deaf distance

in silent sound waves.

 

I sway and swoon

to your lyrics and motion,

that seem perfect from far away.

 

Zip your coat to cover your nose,

and arms wrapped around your legs,

relax, close your eyes and sway.

 

I still see your green iris

circling your wide black pupils

behind eyelid darkness.

 

I wonder, do I appear there,

in your deepest day

dreams of solitude?

 

Do you fancy a prescience

of my somnolent smile?

Because, I can hear your music.

 

Reviews

[J.P.O.et]

yes, the imagery is great here
'like smoke rings float wholly in time and air', I really like that
'that seem', how about seeming or seemly, very small change I know
'and arms wrapped around your legs', that verse, do you mean she is bundled up hugging herself and rocking
I really enjoyed this one
J.P.O.et

[~crazy Beautiful~]

This is a beautiful piece, you have a very visual way about your writing.
These lines
"evanesce between
the see-through space,
of which we take breaths"
blew me away
Very romantic and metatative poetry
I enjoyed this one very much
thank you for entering my contest

[Michael W. Farrelly]

Very very romantic. Nice use of imagery and language.A weekend passes, I see, then days and decades, of lonesome poems too', absolutel gorgeous lines.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Great imagery. Solid writing. "Because, I can hear your music." I hate it when I get put on hold. I often hang up out of sheer frustration. Another good piece of art! Kudos.

-Gabe

[Candle in the wind]

"Because, I can hear your music." what a beautiful closing line to an ethereally beautiful poem.Thanks for sharing I don't want to clutter it words.It brings back the resonance of faded melodies.

[Starlit Scarlett]

This is achingly beautiful. I can relate to the feeling so easily. The sound of the words alone flow perfectly but it's the use of metaphor and your overall meaning that really gets me. Thank you for posting!

[No One Important]

I said it once, I'll say it a thousand, thousand times...your grasp of imagery makes me gasp with astonishment. I can see what you see and hear what you hear as illustrated through your words. Brava!!

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

bravo! haha this poem is so wonderful, its awesome. I love your views on things and your writing style is quite unique. you did a great job here!


- Courtney

[TL Boehm]

evanesce between

the see-through space,

of which we take breaths.



wow. now that's poetry. Well done.