Pain beyond belief

Just a rambler

Pain beyond belief

Pain beyond belief -

Tearing you in two.

Befuddling your brain,

Unsure what to do.

First you go this way,

Then swing that.

Nothing is clear -

You're dragged right back.

Decisions impossible,

Many clouds mar the way.

Wanting to express yourself,

No finding the words to say.

You smile - nod when asked.

Say everythings okay,

Yet while humouring on the outside

Your insides continue to decay.

Author's Note

Comments and criticisms welcome

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love this because it is so true....not only do we put on a good face to cover the pain inside...when people ask us how we are doing...most times they want the simplest answer, "fine, how are you?"
and really wouldn't want us to go into details of all that is wrong...so we put on that show...and they applaud...as we die a little more inside.

[hcarson]

So true and for so many. Yet if we could open up a little its suprising how much we can help one another, even if just by having a chat. Thank you once again for your comments, very much appreciated ☺

[Dave]

Too often people don't really want the truth when they ask,"How are you?" Rather than cause them pain we suffer quietly and smile despite the pain that racks us.

[Inject Positivity]

Very true Helen... I can relate to it very much... I have been in such situations many times in my life where I knew I was breaking inside but I couldn't do anything about it, all I did was smile outside... Confusion comes in mind and we start to panic in such situation because there is hardly any way left for us... Wow!! Now you are doing the works which you were known for and that is being honest with your works, they always contain the biggest truths of human life...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[hcarson]

thank you so much dhiman..that comment is really lovely and means an awful lot to me..it is you i have to thank for waking me up and getting me back to what i enjoy as well as u being a good tutor and teaching me new forms of poetry in which to express myself, iam forever grateful

[Inject Positivity]

My goodness!! I'm grateful to you for your kind words frnd, I did nothing, I just helped you with some ideas, you are more than capable of doing these amazing works... I'm very glad to see you back here again... I'm grateful for that...

[Anindita Janhabee]

This is so true ma'am. I absolutely agree with your statements that you have put here in the form of a beautiful poem. One thing that I like about your poems is the poems always show a kind of reality which exists with everyone but none is able to realize that. I really appreciate the way you've penned the reality with beautiful rhymes and wonderful poetry....
Anindita : )

[hcarson]

Wow thank you Anindita for your lovely review, i try to do real life emotions as they are more relatable and able to conjure real feelings when you write rather than writing about the unkown or fantastical if that makes sense? I really appreciate your comment it was lovely 😊

[Anindita Janhabee]

Of course you are right... It's really a very good idea to write something based on reality. But assume for a while like, what poetry would be without fiction or imaginations? It's absolutely correct that reality is relatable but somewhere, we all know that reality always bites and today reality of world has so many immoral activities, like nothing is good around us today. So if we use imaginations to create a new world then it's really great. All that we have to do is to learn from each day. Imaginations lead us into so many ways of thinking which makes us realize and think about creating the best world and some people try doing it too. Well, this is my view.. but I respect yours as well. I am glad you gave me knowledge about reality... thank you...

[hcarson]

I totally agree with you about the imagination, i just struggle with it..my imagination is very sketchy, i can have some great ideas but struggle to really express them and bring them together. I think that is why i chise reality, it isnt because i disagree with imaginative writing iam just no good at it haha, but hey, iam practising and one day i may produce something worth reading. I have done a few short stories but even thhey are reality based even though it was imagination ...if that makes any sense at all haha, but yes, i totally agree with what you say 😊

[Anindita Janhabee]

I am glad for that... And keep trying... one day you will do it, I am sure....thanks...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

That truth, of ever sliding towards entropy can only shield pain in the waking hours, a most guided piece that I could re-read all day, well done, good read. In the line "Leaving you unsure what to do" you could drop the word you, makes the rhyme run smoother and had the same impact.

[hcarson]

Thank you so much for your lovely comment, really appreciate it. Think you are right with that 'you' so will sort that now. Thank you so much 😊