What Happened

I always tried to be what you wanted

but I could never quite make it

i tried to be you idealistic human

but in the end I always had to fake it

in the end we always ended up fading

the love

the hope 

the friendship 

all gone

nothing left but a empty shell

a empty home

a empty heart

so, whatever happened

to 'ever and always'?

Reviews

[Victoria Elizabeth]

great

very somber, makes me imagine childhood best friends growing different and not being able to adapt to each other with age. its actually really relatable.

[Julius Whimbird]

"But I could never quite make it/I tried to be you idealistic human" That makes it sound like this narrator isn't a human. How about lover instead? I mean, this sounds like a love poem or something of sentiment. Is it not? Grammar bugged me on five different levels, but it's poetry; grammar has no place in poetry says e.e. cummings.

Getting past all of the critique, I think this poem is okay in all honesty. I don't think it's bad but it could be better.

[Ruth]

Bitter and sweet, combined to lament! I felt this! xoxo

[Leslie Philibert]

A good poem, very sad, but the way you look at difficult situations will help you a lot in the future, keep writing good work like this.

[Whiskurz]

A profound piece of writing......Well penned......Whisk