A Small Whisper

My very first poem.

A small whispe tells me

"Time"

 It seems so far away to ease the pain.

I can see you at night.

Waiting.

You tell me

Not Yet!

When work is done

I can join you

In time

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Dear Annie!
Time....four alphabet letters and yet it spans eternity! I have read your note that you heard this word whispered after your husband died. It is only time until we shall join our loved ones again! This is a most thought provoking write that instructs me to enjoy what I have before it is gone!
Thank you for making me stop to think!
Blessings!
Sheila

[Wondering Mind]

I noticed your capital T for Time as a concept , which I feel is an emphasis of the concept over the measure, for what is Time? Heartbeats, blinks of the eye, moments, and so on which seem to go on and on. Heavy are the heartbeats for those wating and longing, yet so light they fly when heart is in joy...The measure is the same but, the effect is so much different in the two cases.
Nicely penned.

[Lady leah]

Let's pray time can heal all. for their are many who suffer still.

[Pigfaced Cherub]

Sadness and longing with hope for reunion is not not sad; just lonely for a while. I love the sentiments expressed in your words. A striking piece.

PFC

[Abd-afeez]

Bravo. I love it because it has got some good disjunction.

[Gandré]

this was sweet and nicely done, creative and flew naturally.Loved it.

[The Devil's Own B***h]

"Time heals all pain". That is how the saying goes. I read something today that says "give Time time." Very inspiring thought. Your poem is filled with a huge feeling of sadness. But one day, things will work out. Give it "time" :)

Great poem.

Josie

[Butterflymom]

This is beautiful, mornful, and just simply well express. Awesome! Keep up the great writing. I will look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself!

[revenant21]

You have wonderful potential, keep writing!


~Revenant

[Aly]

I love this ^^

[Sierra,love]

i like your style of writing
this poem seems to have sadness in it,
am i right?