Set of Sun

~~~For someone important

They held the wind by my flame

And I burned

I watched as my hands turned to ash

And my legs into dust

As I crumbled in the midst

Of your heartache

I saw the light in your eyes snuff out

And watched you plummet,

Heard you crack apart with a sickening clatter

And I wept

For those were the screams of a broken man

In that moment I remembered

How with such fragility

You would hold my small hand

How you would lay down beside me

And bury your face in the back of my head

As your large, strong body held me

Immediately I remembered

How with such conviction

You would press your lips against mine

How you conveyed your feelings

Through your passionate, sincere eyes

As you would gently move my hair behind my ear

I toyed with the seas around me

And I drowned

My lungs burst first

Long before my throat filled with the water

For I had not anticipated such overwhelming regret

I wished for you to call for me again

Even though I knew

Your voice was hoarse from having already done so

Far too many times

It was then that I began to realize

How much I love you

Today still I wait

My imagination getting the better of me

Every day as I lay in an empty bed

Wishing to feel your warmth again

Though it would appear he which is my sun

Will rise no longer

I’ve made a nest

In the blackness of my regret

Attempting to rekindle a fire

Which cannot be revived

Why,

I wonder?

I find I’m still in love…

Even now,

Long after he’s left me.

Author's Note

I've been working on this for a week now haha.

Reviews

[J.R.H.]

Very touching piece of poetry. To yearn for lost love can be so tiring on the soul.

Thanks for the read.

[FateDictates]

wow you have such a beautiful clean classic style that leaves both invawe and somewhat like a messy kid stumbling around this sight in comparison..lovely..

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Riley,

This is very nice. Good flow. Excellent job imparting emotion. We can feel the pain and the regret and we see that some wisdom has been gained. You have learned, albeit a hard lesson. Keep up the honing on this one. Soon it will be razor sharp.

Greatly enjoyed,

Rick

[Tai Ryens]

Ouch.

You entrance the reader with your words in such a poignant way that the reader could get a glimpse of all you feel, of all the heartache, the woes, the grief of watching he whom you adore with everything you are fall into the pit of depression and regret that too many people often find they are trapped in (too late, often-times, might I add!)

What makes this poem even more moving are the glimpses into your past that you shed light on; glimpses into your past that you, yourself must miss dearly.

Nostalgia is a dangerous thing. Well done, truly.

[Noah]

I think your poetry has gotten better, an excellent submission

[Christine]

Thank you for posting such a great poem. For anyone who has felt heartache, something I'm all too familiar with, it's something one can really relate to. I know I did.

[Riley Bray]

Thanks for the praise! :) It can be hard, yeah, but it definitely helps to write about it.