Just so you know

If I was a boy, what could I do?

But sit around and think of you.

To  reminisce, of days gone by,

Of when you wanted me by your side.

But alas you see, I have grown old,

And will not waste time, on things unknown.

The present is now, what parts us miles,

But don't think I've forgotten, your beautiful smile.

And though our union no longer exists,

know that I bear no resentment towards our tryst.

Reviews

[Patrick Gerlits]

The ending threw me off here. I understand the point and I imagine you couldn't find a synonym for bitter that would go well with together.

"Though our union no longer exists,
I bear no resentment towards our tryst."

This might work better and you could possibly continue on with the poem as well.

Other than that the poem flowed exceptionally well. Even the word "Unknown" seems to fit somehow.

My only suggestion is remedying that ending. Unless you like it, than by all means keep it.

[MrBooyay]

Thanks! that's a valid point...I'll change it

[Patrick Gerlits]

I like the ending hehe.

[junein]

Though simple and short, you were able to tell a story with feelings and emotions I'm sure most people have experienced. Very nice.

[Karleem Johnson]

It's a good poem, but the wording could've been better...

[ayele marie dalmeida]

A poem of longing and deepness. i find it very romantic. i love how you express yourself with such creativity. hope to read more from you.