the other side

06/2011 (published in Poets of Blood volume 2)

darkness is traded away for a time

a night full of electricity and animation

a way for the hollows to stir their weariness 

sights and sounds blast into the atmosphere 

                                  

                     lights pulsate across this sea of specters

                     hell bent on the verge of becoming undone

                     stimulation awakens muddled sensations

                     marked up faces brighten upon rapture 

                            

I dance for the relief in the moment

reveling in the exemption of your horror

treacherous scars tell the detrimental tale

losing myself in this crowd of flesh  

                     maybe tonight surrender is in order 

                     letting the weight of vehemence lift  

                     perhaps providence will loosen her

                     grasp on the direction our feet take us                                                           

Author's Note

Reviews

[WatashLegend]

second stanza lose the (s) on "pulsates" it interrupts your flow other than that your flow and imagery is spot on along with the direction of where you led this poem you touched without reaching, you as the writer became a magnet that drew your reader in.

[-Scribe in Style-]

Beautiful... the openng lines of the first and final stanza are in perfect sync.
Thanks for sharing
A

[Ian Faraway]

Last line of the third stanza, did you mean 'losing' instead of 'loosing'? Either way this poem was very good along with the poem and imagery. J'adore! -Ian

[Misty Blue Eyes]

Wish I was there dancing

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Interesting, very interesting.

[Pratik]

This is so Gothic! reading one after a long time .... well done Josh :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The volume of imagery adn detail lays heavy within the breast of my mind, a most classic piece, well done, good read.

[Perfect Mistake]

Very detailed and lovely. I loved the third stanza also. Great work

[Marissa]

I personally also love the third stanza your poetry is deep and soreal I just love it with your big and dark words...you have real potential and inspiration I can tell

[Layla J Omorose]

I agree this is a very dark poem and you captured the essence of its content very well. I could easily see this poem quoted in the beginning or opening chapter of a novel. Well done

[TL Boehm]

The third stanza is my favorite as well.