daydream

01/2012

I've pushed through the weeping branches

that grow out of the foliage surrounding your heart, 

I've stood among the yellow aspens and red maples 

that grow within our dusty memories, 

from time to time I've walked the beaten paths 

winding to and from certain moments

portrayed on these frayed pages, 

hoping to catch a glimpse of you, in a memory perhaps

somewhere forgotten, 

I will wait for you

Author's Note

Thanks to Emily Burns for helping with the format.

Reviews

[Tristan]

The imagery your words evoke is simply delightful: they have lots of texture, and the sound of nature with them. You use words in a deceptively simple way and it shows no sign of forced appearance; everything fits. I do believe, however, that this poem could benefit from being broke up - all of the commas and no periods to break it into sentences makes you feel as if you have to read it all in one breath. But other than that, wonderful work.

[Cassie Fraga]

always a pleasure reading you Josh!!! ur awesome with your work... this is def. going into my fav. pile!!

[Amila Jay]

A beautiful day dream:-)

[ChaoticSoul]

This feels like something out of a lucid dream. It's very clear yet has a misty appeal; offering the line between memories and the present. Really beautifully written!

[patricia]

A clever way to go on bargaining and hoping that we can one day recapture the past. Only my opinion! That's how it felt for me. Beautiful imagery, a deep almost tortured write. Thankyou.

[Aidz]

Dude listening to an acoustic track and well should be brill put to some acoustic tunes... def not country though!!!! Def power ballad lol

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stirring, like a piece from Frost's imagination. A powerful work for sure.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

The feelings put into this is very great! :) Well done.

Your friend, Ashley :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Wow... i love the way you described things in here, the feelings.

[SkinlessFrank]

we wait and wait, hoping she'll come around, but it's all wishful thinking isn't it?

[Rene Velez]

beautiful in scope and imagery, nice vibe Josh.