Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua
Ouch. The pain is felt by the reader as expressed by the writer I enjoy the font play - it conveys much as well. To hoping this is a write only, but feels more than that. Thought are with you young man.
I really like the structure of this piece. It shows how one can play around with poems and have the aesthetic go along with the linguistic. This flows like a song and has a wonderful lyrical sense to it. "Inside out I stood / in the devouring / flame as she feel" is a really brilliant line. It creates a powerful image and the rest of the piece follows suit with that. Very nice!
Awe, this was a sad, but cute piece. The feeling in this piece everyone can relate to if they are missing someone they love. It was a great write. I loved it!!
"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..
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