It Started With A Jagerbomb

A love poem to my boyfriend - a modern day love story.

It started with a Jagerbomb

A midnight sinner's taxi

We met by chance, A misfit match

No romance, Nothing classy.

Was only meant to be a joke

But a joke became a date

It took some time to make you mine

But the sex was worth the wait ;)

We'd had some fun hadn't fallen in love

Never thought that it would last

From one night stand to being my man

Time has moved so fast.

At Christmas time still going strong

Survived our first bad fight

Some time apart, A new year start

A not so silent night.

The perfect couple from then on

Falling in love together

In your bed, remember I said

I want to be yours forever.

You're everything I've always wanted 

Exactly what I need

Demanding, smart, honest at heart

Determined to succeed.

And talented it turns me on

To watch you play guitar

In pretty green, and skinny black jeans

My personal rock star.

I never thought when I was young

I'd meet my prince in Sinners

But modern day love is this way

Least we didn't meet on tinder. 

It started with a Jagerbomb 

A midnight sinner's taxi

We met by chance, A misfit match

Turned into something lasting. 

Author's Note

This is my first poem!

Reviews

[Chris]

Quite an adventure to find and travel and even a treasure discovered!

[Planet x]

Beautiful words and format of writing , you did really well

[Zoya]

Amazing...the poem as well as the story that lies within. So well done.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Not a bad result from a digestif made with 56 herbs and spices at a strength of 35% alcohol by volume. And ... a pretty good 'first time' poem to match - brilliant! :-)

[Nicholas Shea]

This is great! I love how it progresses and does my favorite thing by bringing the beginning back to the end!

[emipoemi]

Not bad for a first poem! It reads well, flows well, has some very fund lines. You're musicality is off in a couple of places, and I would suggest adding in some commas to help readers understand which words go with which thoughts and make them understand better how the whole thing is supposed to flow. But really, your main concern is that there are simply 3 - 4 lines which are merely one syllable too much for the musicality to flow smoothly, and with a poem that is consistent pretty much all the way, such a small detail is noticeable and in a way mars the power of the whole piece. Which is simply a delight to read, and I quite enjoyed the echo at the end. Well done!

[jsnape29]

Thank you for commenting! I''m very much a beginner at the moment so appreciate the constructive feedback.

[emipoemi]

with pleasure