Meetings in the fog

Already your smile burns off the mist.

Face still unclear,
  but your presence shines.

Each time the glancing touch,
  erupts the inferno.

Each time a simple touch,
  burns away the fog.

Each time,
  we must say goodbye.
 

Until,
  another foggy day.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. This is short but intense. A very good write...:)

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Rossen]

Captures the misty mystique of the late morning vanishings...

[Jon Roggie]

...and the returns. Thank you.

[Ruth]

I think this is amazingly beautiful and tangible :)

[Jon Roggie]

All I can do is set a scene. Glimmers through the fog? Yeah...

[Ruth]

Yup :)

[Emily B]

perfection in a few words

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you. I tend to keep it simple. Nice to see one catch hold. Thanks again.

[Emily B]

a kindred soul, maybe, i used to tell the cafe that everybody from six to ninety six ought to be able to read the poem and take something away from it. I used to get a lot, what a cute, sweet poem comments. But I know that work like this has a deceptive depth, wade your feet in and risk being swallowed up.

[Tree]

I thought the format and structure was great. Lately I have been drawn to poetry that exhibits simple language and a simple structure. The meaning, floating to the surface. Nothing to obstruct the view.

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you. I just feel honest when I use a simple format. Why try to hide a creation behind simple cosmetics? Again, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i feel this longing...days on end...can relate to the distance of this relationship and the anticipation of seeing each other again..things do get kind of foggy, don't they?

[Jon Roggie]

The comfort of a loved one can burn the mist away from the twilight's dim. Sorry, for whatever reason, I had to get that line out.

Still, I like the anticipation

[Renée]

o0o0ooo anticipation of the next meeting...Simple bliss nice

[Jon Roggie]

I really need to pay attention to what I write. Never sinks in til about a month later. Now I have become a romantic. Nope, can't do it....

[Renée]

oh! and here I was just about to put my head on your shoulder to ! ( ; lol

[Jon Roggie]

once again, i screw up. Arghhh!

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~ well... this beautiful heartsong makes me wish that every day is a foggy day... stunning poetry, monsieur jon...

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you, princess.

[Corset]

Lyrics & music: daryl hall

Baby, if we can't solve any problems
Why do we lose so many tears?
Oh, so you go again
When the leading man appears
Always the same theme
But can't you see weve got everything going on and

Everytime you go away
You take a piece of me with you

Go on and go free
Maybe you're too close to me
I can feel your body move
But does it mean that much to me
I can't go on singing the same theme
Cause you can't see weve got everything
Baby, even though you know that

Every time you go away
You take a piece of me with you
You just don't care

[Jon Roggie]

Nice response!

[Corset]

Is that a hummingbird feeder in your avatar? Hummingbirds are the coolest.

[Jon Roggie]

Yes. Place in the mountains nearby. Dozens would show up whenever we put out the feeders.

[Corset]

I love them, they are so magical, it's like seeing a unicorn, I guess if I saw dozens daily they would loose that magic eventually, like seeing the breathtaking scenery everyday , sooner or later you stop noticing, may that never happen to you, may you wake with the magic of hummingbirds everyday! :)