A Quirky Smile

Sometimes the situation becomes so unfathomable that you just can not do anything but smile

A great storm is looming

Somebody will care to warn you

Intensively, not to move further for a while

Do not reply, just smile

 

 There are some acute bends in the river

No body can fathom its meanders

But somebody will warn you

Against the flood that stretches a mile

Do not reply, just smile

 

You are in the middle of the jungle

Among the rearing sounds of animals

As ferocious as hostile

but a sign says all are caged

and  not to reply, just to smile?

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

That's definitely good advice, and yet easier said than done. A nice reminder that sometimes we need to relax and "just smile." There was one line that I noticed seemed a little bit off:

"Against the floods that stretches a mile" It seems to me like it should say "stretch" to match the plural "floods." Or maybe it would flow better if it read, "Against the floods that stretch FOR miles." Just how I perceived it, though.

[Gandré]

mysterious, simple and worth reading.. loved.

[NA]

It gives me a sense of uncertainty, it's almost as though the poem should be cheerful, like a smile, but also make you slightly nervous when it's used.
I can only repeat the comments below on your grammar.

[Autumn Dawn Gorny]

You hit the nail on the head with this poem. A smile can convey a plethora of emotions without a single word uttered. It also can be used to calm oneself without much effort and no money.

[An owl on the moon]

A smile seems to communicate a deep hope.. a faith at times.. a message without words that no matter the weather, there is still a glimmer of sunshine.. Beautifully confessed.

[Lily Mae]

I think you just wrote my life story;)xx Great write and I agree the first stanza is what grabbed at me...x I enjoyed reading this very much...x

[GlamGirl]

I really like this one. Great write!

[Andrew - Moon Fixer]

very nice. it flows nicely. verynwell done.

[Andrew - Moon Fixer]

I like this, but the first paragraph got me. this part ... Intensively, not to move further a while. ... Try this ...( Intensively, not to move further for a while ) what do you think? Like i said before try to make them flow. smooth, I know i have some problems with that too. some times it takes me a lot of time to do that. but your poem is really good.
thank you Moon fixer

[Veronica Chandler]

Very cool piece you have written; I enjoyed the read and message, I will heed it well and "Just Smile"